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   AaronOfMpls

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   24 September 2014, 12:41AM

   Finally, the end of Book 1! Book 2 will come eventually, but I'll probably start on Aronil's story first, and/or do some short bits on my other characters like Rog, Aenar, or Avos Athren.
   
   Thanks for reading this, all!
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      AaronOfMpls

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      24 September 2014, 2:28AM

      More bonus shots are up in my Supporter Images.
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   aok

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   06 October 2014, 11:01PM

   Very well done my friend! I hope you will do more story work with these two. They are sort of the classic Shakespearian example of "Who cares what our families in conflict will think"
   Bravo!
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      AaronOfMpls

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      07 October 2014, 2:26AM

      Thanks, aok!
      
      I'm taking a break to get Aronil and others going, but I do plan to do more with these two.
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   04 October 2014, 3:23AM

   By Satan's sausage, I wish he had blown Proventus out the window. Would've been entertaining, to say the least. It makes me so annoyed every time I hear him say that. I know it's kind of a cheap way of creating conflict, but I just can't help feeling irritated. Any deviating culture (opposed to any major power) is always treated with such incredible disrespect.
   
   About the Redguards: At first I thought Kolmar might be going a bit racist, but I quickly realized it would be out of character - I was glad to see it wasn't the case, even if it was equally dark.
   
   Great finish, and a nice insight into Kolmar's life, too.
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      AaronOfMpls

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      04 October 2014, 5:55AM

      Thanks Wres!
      
      As I told wolfgrimdark, I've had a few of my characters shout their objections to Proventus before, though usually at an empty part of the room to avoid getting arrested. But that didn't quite seem fitting for Andil to me.
      
      Yeah, Kolmar may be a proud Nord, but he's never been terribly prejudiced; he tends to like (or sometimes dislike) everyone pretty equally. And I figured it made sense for him and Andil to open up to each other more after all this.
      
      Glad you enjoyed this!
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   wolfgrimdark

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   27 September 2014, 12:19AM

   Actually I think the way you wrapped all this of works great as a semi-ending for now. It is great to see them as friends with benefits It felt right and a good play for them to leave things before heading to the Greybeards and whatever fate has in store for them.
   
   "Andil felt a slight urge to resolve the dispute by Shouting in Proventus's face, but held it in check." I have been there many times myself lol. A great line as well as the one about Ondolemer (sp?) dropping a brick.
   
   All in all great chapter and enjoy the style of sticking with the quest but adding in a little of your own ideas to make the story your own (or Andil's as the case may be).
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      AaronOfMpls

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      27 September 2014, 3:48AM

      Thanks, Jon! Indeed, I like working my own little things into Bethesda's world like this. I've done it with all of my characters to some extent; Andil is only the first I've written much about.
      
      Yah, it felt right to me, too, to semi-end this way -- especially since I may have other romantic prospects for Andil in the future. (I haven't entirely decided yet, but I've got one NPC in mind, who has yet to be shown.)
      
      Ans yes, I've had a few of my characters Shout their objections to Proventus's doubts, though usually at an empty part of the room to avoid an assault charge.
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   25 September 2014, 4:55AM

   Nice chapter hon. Nice to get a bit more background on Kolmar. These two (so diametrically opposed on the surface) make for such a great couple. I also liked the elaboration about how the Redguards get a bit rough in their search for Saadia. I always had a feeling that was the case!
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      AaronOfMpls

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      25 September 2014, 8:53AM

      Thanks, Jess! Indeed, they go well together.
      
      As for the Alik'r, I figured Kolmar's bit fit, given their random encounters with Redguard women on the road.