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Kavel Book 1 - Bloodmoon Born - Prologue Part 3

Previous Chapter: Prologue Part 2.

From the Annuals of Kavel Bloodmoon as told by WolfGrimDark. For more great stories on Nexus check out the Nexus Writers List.

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Kolfinna and Bron departed the ship late the following afternoon. The captain personally escorted them to the docks and wished the pair well. Bron fidgeted nervously, his sharp eyes scanning everywhere for signs of trouble, while Kolfinna handed the Captain a note for Tivela.

“If I could beg one more favor of you Captain. A note for Mistress Tivela to let her know we arrived safely and that my son Kavel has been born.”

Along with the note she gave the captain a gold Septum for his trouble, which he refused. “I do not know your story, nor do I wish to, but I suspect you will need that gold far more than I do. Tivela will be very pleased to know I helped you arrive safely and her favor is all the payment I need.”

Bron tugged on his sisters sleeve and whispered, “Hurry up Kol. I do not like this place. I feel like everyone is watching us.”

Kolfinna nodded farewell to the captain and then let her brother lead her off the docks to the city entrance. Kavel squirmed in her arms, his tiny fists clenched and his face wrinkled up as if he might cry. Kolfinna rocked him gently as she whispered a small sleep charm to keep him quiet. She would need to make a papoose soon. Only two days old and already eleven pounds; her instincts told her he would be a strong one.

“You’re going to be a mighty warrior someday my Van.” She whispered. While greatly honored that Hircine had given her son a Princely name she knew in her heart he would always be her Van. Her hope.

Bron nudged her and she focused on her surroundings. They were waiting in line to be checked in by the guards before entering the city.

“Papers please.” The bored guard said to Tivela’s clerk Raina who, along with her assistant, had accompanied them aboard the ship. Tivela had provided documents identifying the four of them as her employees.

Kolfinna squeezed her brothers hand as the guards stamped their papers and they were allowed into the city proper. As they did neither of them noticed the pair of dark eyes that watched them from a distance.





A soft snow had started to fall as dawn’s pale light struggled, and failed, to break through the morning cloud cover. Raina stood with them while the carriage driver got his two horses hitched up. They had only stayed the one night in Windhelm. They had no idea if the Hand was still after them but they wanted to be well away from the city just in case.So while they remained hidden away in Tivela’s warehouse, Raina and her assistant had picked up supplies and made the travel arrangements.

“Are you sure you won’t stay with us? There is plenty of work to do and Kolfinna’s baby would be safe within the city walls.” Raina asked Bron, her eyes scanning his youthful and well-muscled body with sultry eyes indicating there was another offer hidden behind her words.

Grinning, the slightly blushing Bron gave a self-conscious flex of his broad shoulders and reluctantly declined, “We really do appreciate your offer, and all the help Tivela has provided, but someone is expecting us and he is not the type of person you want to disappoint.”

Raina gave a cute little pout but nodded. She gave Bron an overly long hug, one hand reaching down to give his tight buttock’s a good squeeze as she whispered, “I can see why Tivela adores you so much Bron. Be careful and I hope we meet again one day.”

She then turned to Kolfinna who was watching the whole exchange and trying hard not to roll her eyes. Raina just chuckled softly before leaning in to give her a gentle hug. She looked down at the groggy Kavel and gently touched the soft black fuzz on his head. He turned wide leaf-green eyes on her and gave a small burp.

“Oh Kolfinna, he is so adorable! I do so wish you would change your minds.” Raina said softly. Kolfinna went to reply but Raina hushed her, “I know, I know. Go then and may Mara bless you all.”

Then she was gone, running back to the city with one hand clutched to her hood to hold it on tight. Kolfinna handed Kavel up to Bron and then pulled herself into the back of the carriage. They had spent most of their gold on supplies and the carriage ride; only a couple of coins remained.

Brother and sister sat together as they watched the city of Windhelm slowly fade from distance. Neither had any idea where they were really headed. Hircine had told Kolfinna to follow the signs and they would lead them to one of his holy places. Well she hadn’t seen any definitive signs yet but she had felt a gentle tug to the south-west. Raina had given them a map of Skyrim and based on her advice they decided to travel to Whiterun. It was their hope that once there Kolfinna would be able to narrow down the search.

“Don’t worry Bron, he won’t let us down.” Kolfinna said softly as she studied her brothers worried expression. He turned and gave her a cryptic look.

“I know Kol.” Bron said, although his voice lacked conviction. “I can’t help but worry though.” He turned away from her and looked back the way they had come, his eyes ever searching through the falling snow. In a low voice he said, “The three Hand that attacked us at the lodge seemed to know who we were. I can’t help but shake the feeling the others will come after us.”

Kolfinna said nothing. She had faith in the Huntsman; while he could be harsh at times he was a Prince of his word. If they could reach the sanctuary they would be safe.





Nelthas was almost pleased for a change. The Silver Hand ship had made excellent time, arriving in Windhelm only one day after the siblings had landed. Upon docking Nelthas had sought out his contact who confirmed his belief that the two Berhamask survivors had been on board. Of particular interest was the news that the female had born her child. At first Nelthas wasn’t sure if that was good news or bad. In the end he decided it was bad. Pregnant she was much weaker and would have slowed their escape. With the child born she would be far more protective and dangerous.

Their spy at the docks had then led them to Tivela’s warehouse. It didn’t take long to get all the information they needed from the two clerks. When he was done getting his information he let the men enjoy what was left of Raina and her associate before having the bodies dumped in the bay.



He had a dozen hand-picked men for the mission plus the artifact from Lord Arom. He hadn’t been happy about that discovery. When he got back to the ship he had found the hideous fetish packed up and waiting for him in his room. With it was an envelope from his employer. Inside he found additional instructions for the artifact, a rough map showing where Arom suspected the siblings wore headed, and a reminder that failure was not an option. Nelthas swore under his breath as he repeated the last sentence, “Failure was not an option?” Who did that mer think he was, threatening Nelthas Dareathys like that!

A nagging suspicion in the back of his head was finally reaching consciousness at that point. He did not know who Lord Arom really was but he was no simple Altmer necromancer. When he had tried to get Kolfinna and Bron’s destination out of Raina she had gibbered madly that even the siblings didn’t seem to know. Of course by that time his knives had done so much damage she would have sworn she was a Thalmor spy if it would have stopped the pain. Yet if his employer had been able to provide a map that suggested Arom knew a lot more about what was happening than he let on. The map had the words Sacred Grotto written near the western mountains. Sacred to who? If the two werebears wore fleeing to it that could only mean the Father of Manbeasts, Prince Hircine.



No, Nelthas concluded, he didn’t like where this was leading one bit. The only thing he hated more than the Princes and the Divines was being their pawn. Yet even if what he suspected was true it didn’t change his plans for dealing with Lord Arom. No, it just meant altering his strategy.

Unconsciously his hand went to the Dwemer amulet he wore around his neck, rubbing the burnished copper metal rhythmically as his mind drifted into the past.

Nothing but darkness, violence and death had surrounded Nelthas. A product of rape his mother had sold him to slavers, wanting nothing to do with him. His first owners were brutally cruel and he had learned at an early age that the only one who cared for Nelthas was Nelthas. He remembered hearing about the Divines from the other slaves. He began to pray to them for freedom, even death, but no matter how often he did none of them ever answered. Nor, he noted, did they ever seem to answer the prayers of the other slaves. It was clear to him they were a façade. As cold and heartless as his owners, if they existed at all.

Around twelve he was sold again, only this time to a powerful lord who wanted to forge him into a cold emotionless assassin. It was then he learned the true meaning of pain as his trainers tried to break his mind so they could bind him to their masters will. It was then he turned to the Princes. He knew only bits and pieces of lore surrounding them, picked up from other slaves and overheard conversations. Yet the princes seemed no more inclined to respond than the divines had. Except for one.

His mind almost broken Nelthas had begged Boethiah for aid, the same Prince his owner worshipped. She had responded but only to laugh at him.

“Why should I aid a worthless slave?” She had asked.

He had replied, “I will pledge my soul to you if you but help me escape.”

In a mocking voice she had responded, “Your soul is weak and worthless. Make something of yourself and perhaps then I shall listen.”

He had wept after she had left, her laughter echoing in his mind. It was the last time he ever had. The Void take all gods he swore! Something in his mind did break that night but not in the way his trainers expected. Nelthas became utterly devoted to himself and no one else. If even the gods would not help him then it was clear he would have to do it himself. He would succeed or die but never again would he seek aid from Aedra or Prince.

And he had succeeded. He had pretended to be broken by acting docile and servile. He had earned their trust. And then, in the end, he had slaughtered them all. The master and his trainers. The man’s family, his guards, his slaves, all of them. Then he had left Morrowind and became the Crimson Raven. His reputation in the underworld had grown quickly and soon only the richest and most powerful could afford his fees and services. It was then that Boethiah sought him out. One night, while enjoying a goblet of warm wine after a fresh kill, she came to him in her mortal form.

“I see my little fledging has finally found his wings. You have proven your worth and so I have come to grant you the honor of becoming one of my followers.” She had whispered in a soft seductive voice as she sidled up close to him.



Nelthas was beside himself with rage, his normally cool control broken. He shoved her away and drew his ebony dagger, Soulcatcher, as he panted in anger. “You bitch. You gave me nothing when I asked for aid and now you return and expect me to kiss your princely ass?”

Full expecting to be struck down he glared at the Prince. Yet she just stood there watching him coldly, an amused smile on her lips. “Gave you nothing? I gave you everything.”

Nelthas snorted. Cryptic as always. How he hated them. He spat, “Gave me everything? I tricked my owners. I killed them all and left a river of blood behind me. I mastered the arts of assassination. I survived on my own. I became the Crimson Raven through my own sweat and blood. No one has ever helped me except me, myself, and I.”

Boethiah looked at him dismissively, “If you believe that then you are a fool and I have no use for fools.”



With that she had vanished and Nelthas had never heard from her again. Yet the encounter made him realize he had a weakness and it was one he was going to address. Over the years he became a specialist in killing mages, priests, and anything supernatural. He began collecting powerful artifacts and enchantments, one of which was the Dwemer device he wore around his neck. It had cost him his entire fortune at the time but had been worth it.


Thinking of the amulet returned his thoughts to the present and he tucked the amulet away beneath his armor.Pleasant as it was to think about taking Lord Arom down he had more pressing matters to focus on. Twice now his targets had managed to escape him. Losing them on Solstheim had been bad enough but losing them in Whiterun had infuriated him. It was getting personal now; he had a reputation to maintain.



They had had almost a day’s lead on him. He was familiar with the carriage route, since he had taken it a few times himself to the closest thing he had ever called home, the Nightgate Inn. They would approach Whiterun from the north, coming down past the Whitewatch Tower. A faster way was going south, cutting through the Uttering hills and past the Valtheim towers, notorious for bandits and the main reason the road was avoided, and then straight through the eastern plains to Whiterun.



Nelthas had pushed the horses and men brutally, arriving at the Whiterun Stables in the late afternoon with most of his men. The others he had left along the road to watch for the carriage. Posing as a small band of mercenaries looking for work he had chatted up the stable master. He gave a small sigh of relief when the man told him that the carriage was running late but should be arriving shortly. Nelthas’s plan was a simple one; his favorite kind as it meant less chance of something wrong. He and his men would keep tabs on the pair until such a time presented itself that they could kill them with no witnesses.



A few hours later Nelthas was growing very irate and a little concerned. None of his men had reported in and the carriage was now six hours overdue. Just as he was about to go scouting himself one of his men showed up. Dismounting he pulled Nelthas aside and said the carriage had finally showed up but from the south and sans passengers. When he had stopped the driver to ask about the delay the man has responded that he had been well paid by his passengers to drop them off in Riverwood. He had then hiccupped and guiltily admitted he might have stopped for a drink or two before heading back.



Swearing mightily Nelthas ordered the scout to fetch the men watching the northern road. He had to decide, and quickly, if he should head to Riverwood and try and pick up their trail or head directly to the grotto marked on Arom’s map. He wished he knew if this had been the siblings plan all along or if they were simply growing more cautious. Regardless, design or chance, they had outfoxed him once again. In the end he made the safest assumption, that they knew they were being followed and thus would actively try to throw of pursuit. That meant his best hope was to reach the grotto before them so he could plan an ambush. If what Lord Arom had told him was true things would go much easier if he prevented the siblings from gaining entry to the grotto and the protection of their patron. He glanced over at the horse carrying the Hagraven fetish. His lips twisted into a nasty smirk. Even if they did make it he would have a little surprise for them.



“By the Soulless One that s’wit Lord Arom had better pay double for this job!” Nelthas Dareathys cursed darkly as he jumped on to his horse and ordered his men to follow. A few glowered at his back, as they hadn’t had much rest or food, but none dared risk his wrath by complaining. Driving the horses hard Nelthas led the men to the south-west as he cut across the Whiterun tundra and headed towards the mountains just north of Lake Ilinalta. The siblings had out maneuvered him in Whiterun but they wouldn’t be so lucky the next time he vowed.









The trio had made exceptionally good time. The driver, nervous about bandit rumors, had pushed the horses extra hard. As they approached Whiterun Kolfinna felt a subtle sense of foreboding begin to grow all around her. It was like a vague itch that became more uncomfortable the harder she tried to ignore it. She knew the High Shaman could glimpse the future by studying the patterns in nature – leaves spinning in the wind, the whirls of foam in a brook, or forest debris scattered on the ground – but it was a skill she had never been taught. Yet everywhere she looked she seemed to see darkness closing in around them.



She had said nothing to Bron until she spotted the wolf. They had just come to a major crossroads and the driver had stopped to gather news from some of the local guards. Kolfinna had happened to glance along the southern road and saw the wolf preening itself near a waterfall. Kolfinna watched as the wolf got up and looked right at her. It then ran out onto the road and shot a glance back at her before speeding off to the south. The guard swore, “Would you look at that? Those scavengers are getting bolder every year!”



Yet Kolfinna knew it was a sign, a sign they wore meant to follow. It took their remaining coin and a tragic story to convince the driver to make a detour to Riverwood but they finally persuaded him. They left him drinking at the local inn while they hurried along the road to the southwest. They followed the road as it traced its way along a river until they reached its source, a large lake that lay glistening in the setting sun.



It was then she spotted the same wolf, watching them from the northern side of the river. She pointed him out to Bron who looked at her quizzically and then asked wide-eyed, “You think that is another sign from our Lord?”



Kolfinna nodded. She stretched her shoulders, the weight of the baby on her back making them stiff and sore, as she pointed to the west. “We are getting close, I can feel it.”



“Then let’s get moving. It will be growing dark soon and we should make as much of the light as we can. I don’t think I will feel comfortable until we are safe inside his protection.” Bron suggested to which Kolfinna readily agreed.

The water did not seem to deep, and it was moving at a calm pace, so the siblings removed most of their clothes and bundled everything up in their sleeping blankets. Bron, being the tallest and strongest of the two, carried both bundles while Kolfinna held Kavel over her head. For once luck seemed to be on their side and the water never went past her breasts.They rested for a moment on the other side, doing their best to dry off before donning their clothes again.



Their scout would appear every now and then as a flash of gray among the deep greens and browns of the forest. The wolf was leading them slowly upwards and soon the temperature began to drop as a light snow began to fall. As darkness and snow settled over the land, brother and sister paused for a moment to honor the beauty of the moment.

“It’s a little like home isn’t it?” Kol said softly as she stopped to check on a fussing Kavel.

“Almost better in some ways. The air smells clean and fresh, untainted by the scent of ash and sulfur of the island.” Bron agreed. “There are worse places to be exiled.”

“Someday we shall see home again Bron. We are strangers here and I do not think the people here will accept us like the Skaal of Solstheim do. Even the Dunmer have grudgingly accepted us there. Yet, for now, it seems to be our only choice. When things are safe we shall return.” Kolfinna said although to Bron’s ears it sounded like she was trying to convince herself as much as she was him.

Bron scowled, his face growing angry as he remembered the carnage back at their little village. “Safe Kol? We will never be safe until we avenge our tribe. What is to prevent it from happening again? We have to make sure those killers never return.”

Kolfinna’s soft eyes met Bron’s hot gaze for a moment before turning away. She knew as a shaman she should counsel the peaceful path yet how could she when her own heart yearned to avenge the death of her tribe and her husband? Instead she merely nodded and indicated they should continue. They travelled for another hour, moving slower and slower as they did. While both could see well at night the snow and clouds soon covered the unfamiliar territory in a cloak of darkness making it dangerous to move fast. In addition Kavel had begun to cry and Kolfinna knew he needed food and changing.



When they stumbled over an old hunters campsite they decided it would be safer to make camp for the night than to risk injury travelling in the dark. The wolf had been leading them up an old trail that most likely was a pass over the mountains. Somewhere on the other side was their destination but how close Kolfinna could not say. Weariness etched their faces; the only rest they had gotten was a few snatches of sleep on the carriage ride.

So they made camp. While Kolfinna took care of Kavel, Bron laid out their beds and prepared a small dinner. A fire would have been welcome but while they had sensed no sign of pursuit they decided not to take any chances. They had no fresh meat so the only offering they could give to their Prince was some of the dried elk and salmon they had picked up in Riverwood. They placed it a few yards away from the camp while Kolfinna said a prayer of thanks. A short while later their guide appeared. The wolf sniffed the food carefully before grabbing it in his jaws and running off into the darkness.



Bron had wondered about their guide but Kolfinna had told him she sensed no otherworldly presence in the beast. Most likely, she had explained, the Huntsman had imprinted in the wolves mind where they needed to be led and a command to stay with them until its obligation was met.

Kolfinna took the first watch, wanting to spend some time with Kavel and cast a few protective charms over him. She had been doing that daily since he had been born. She knew they would do little against a serious threat but it made her feel better knowing he had some protection. When she was done she set a few frost traps around the front of the campsite. She was not powerful enough to weave a full defensive ward but she could handle this much at least. The camp was tucked into a corner made by the mountain rocks so she only had to lay down a handful to keep them protected. Exhausted from the effort she woke Bron from his sleep so he could take his turn at guard duty. Bron gave her a quick hug and helped her get tucked in with Kavel.



“Sleep well Kol.” He whispered but she had already shut her eyes and falling asleep. His face softened for a moment as he looked at little Kavel. He reached out one thick and calloused finger and touched the child’s nose tenderly in wonder. The child stirred and reached up with a tiny fist to grip his finger for a moment before letting go.

Bron stood, vowing again to see his family to safety; he would let nothing harm his sister or nephew. He was tempted to take on his beast form for guard duty but doing so put a strain on the body. More experienced shifters could hold the form for hours before they had to revert back but Bron could only manage a half hour so far. That, and concerns over alarming the locals, had kept them from travelling as werebears. Instead he summoned a small amount of change to enhance his physical senses.





Nelthas and his men had set up camp near the entrance to the grotto. They had arrived at dusk and conducted a quick survey of the area as the sun set. They found no tracks leading to or from the area so Nelthas had to assume they had arrived before their prey. The entrance was what appeared to be a narrow cave cut into the base of the mountain. There were a mix of bones and what looked like primitive weapons and other offerings to Hircine scattered around the ground out front. The only problem, they quickly discovered, was that the cave opening was too narrow; a skeever would have been hard pressed to make it through.



Much later that night Nelthas got restless and went to investigate the grotto again. How very intriguing Nelthas thought to himself. Had the entrance always been this narrow or had some natural event made it this way? Did the werebeasts expect it to be accessible? Surely they must or they wouldn’t be fleeing here. If what Raina had said was true they were most likely going off some legend or ancient lore. The girl, Kolfinna, was a shaman so it was also possible her magic was guiding her here. Regardless there was certainly something odd about the place. It gave him the same uneasy feeling that the hagraven fetish gave him. It stank of the Daedra and that could only mean one thing; the Princes. The final pieces of the puzzle were starting to come together and he was less than pleased with the picture being revealed.



His ponderings were interrupted when one of his scouts ran into the camp calling for him. On their way to the grotto Nelthas had noticed an old mountain path that looked like it went over the mountain. On a hunch he had sent his best scout, a Khajiit with exceptional night vision, to check it out. He motioned the feline humanoid to approach and speak.

“Commander Nelthas, this one believes they have found them. Darji was watching from a ledge that overlooked the path and heard voices, male and female. Even with this one’s night sight Darji could not make out details. But this Khajiit saw one of them working magic and its glow showed a child in its arm.” The mercenary reported.

“Could they have spotted you?” Nelthas asked, his expression cold as he stared at the Silver Hand.

The Khajiit shook his head, “This one did as you asked and did not get close. The wind was in blowing towards Darji hiding Darji’s scent.”



Nelthas dismissed him, his mind working quickly. It had to be them he knew. Should he wait till they came to him? That had been his plan. To hold off on casting the fetish until they had gotten too close to flee, although that meant tricky timing as it took a short while for the magic to act. Too soon and he would warn them away. Too late and they might have access to their beast form for a short while. While had had a dozen men he had seen what a werebear could do, let alone two of them protecting a child.

However, the biggest problem with that plan was the fact that the entrance to the grotto was out in plain sight. He and his men had no place to hide. He had hoped to set up an ambush around the grotto, possibly even inside it, but that had turned out to be impossible. Before the Khajiit had arrived his backup plan had been to hide out in the Tundra. When they spotted them near the grotto he and his men would rush them while they stood dumbfounded before the blocked entrance.



But now he had the chance to sneak up on them unawares. He could summon the power of the fetish while his men surrounded their camp, catching them off-guard and unable to use their beast form. By the time they sensed the casting it would be too late, his men would be on them. Should they somehow slip out of the trap he knew right where they would be headed. They would know that as well but they wouldn’t know the sanctuary was inaccessible.

He made up his mind. A good assassin always had to be flexible and adapt to sudden changes. Considering all angles his best option was to attack. He summoned the men and laid out his plans.



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ENB: NiceENB by Saltr

Notes: Just as an aside I have spent more time on google with these last few stories than ever before. If anyone monitored my search patterns they would swear I was about to be a new parent. I wanted to make sure my handling of Kol and Van was somewhat realistic so I have looked up the average weight ranges for newborn males, when they can grow hair on their heads, and for the last chapter a lot of research on going into labor, how long it can take, the stages, etc. I won’t claim it is all perfectly accurate but I made a good attempt at it. It also has to be balanced by the fact that Kolfinna is a shaman and hence knows nature magic and healing as well as the ability to see into the spirit world.

Music this story - I don't really know if what I picked works for the story but this song by Chris Isaak sends chills through me. It is ... just powerful and for some reason I liked pairing it with this story. The second song I thought matched the feeling of Kol,Van, and Bron struggling to find a safe haven.

45 comments

  1. aok
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    Ah! Boethiah had a part to play I see. I love/hate Nelthas. He is ruthless but that is what he is supposed to be. I wonder what he will think once he discovers that he is only a puppet on one of the many tentacled arms.
    I am very worried about the trap being sprung on our friends. Seems escape is impossible...
    Brilliant work Wolf!
    1. wolfgrimdark
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      Thanks Arnold. Sorry these got so long! My prologue got a bit carried away :p Still I hope you enjoy them.
  2. pangallosr
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    another fantastic read Wolf..

    I was planning to say something about the Chris Isaak selection, how much I have always liked the song and would never had thought to put it within the choreography of your story. Strange how well it fit the mood.

    Researching the internet like a soon to be parent..... well isn't that exactly what you are. The story, Kavel, they are your children. You are doing only what any good parent would want to do, learn and provide only the best for their offspring.

    Really making Nelthas one to dislike....nearly hate. But is it hate of the man or what events formed him....
    1. wolfgrimdark
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      Thanks Steven! I think it is easier to hate Nelthas and the events that formed him. Human nature. Having some limited experience in psychology I know how easy it is for people who have been taught to think critically and ask questions to think it is natural to do so ... but it isn't. Free will isn't as free as people think it is. For all our decisions are based on all of our past experiences - since birth we start to form (along with genetic influences) all of our believes and views. They simmer in our unconscious and so when it comes time to make a decision - say a dark or light path - well much of that is possibly predetermined by past. Someone might have such a world view that the idea of a light path is so alien to them it doesn't really come into consideration - to them it might be considered pure madness to even consider. The problem with free will is that it is easy to go "of course I have free will - I can decide to have tea this morning instead of coffee. But is that really some conscious decision? Or is it a decision made by the unconscious past experiences of billions upon billions of events? How much of our actions and decisions are truly free of past influence and made solely on an objective exertion of pure will?
  3. Corfus
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    Another good read, Good to see the two siblings are being very cautious with their travels plans trying to throw off anyone following them. I guess these precautions are a must considering they are all that's left and they carry the future in a baby.

    Nelthas is a wily one, very well prepared and detailed planning, they almost gave him the slip, but he knows their destination and he's quick to change his plans and adapt. He could be a problem for Bron & Kolfinna as he lies in wait, and I'm a bit concerned for them since we don't see them....
    I guess Kavel's going to be OK since I have seen picture of him..... ho hum.. anyway on to the next part.

    Nice work Jon
    1. wolfgrimdark
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      Thanks buddy! I think I saw you made it through to part 4. Hope you had a six pack with you

      I tried to make Nelthas a real nasty cad, evil and dark, yet also give him a little depth and background. Not so people would like him but so they might see how he became who he is. Not sure if I succeeded or not.

      The down side to people knowing I rarely make new main characters ... highly unlikely he will get killed off in the first chapter
  4. Piratenbraut
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    I`m really struggling with this chapter because of the music. I love both songs so much that I find myself unable to concentrate on what I`m reading. Instead, I`m just watching those beautiful picture and listen to the music. But I guess that speaks for your choice.
    1. wolfgrimdark
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      Thanks! I was listening to the CI song over and over and over while writing this long chapter. But also love the second one for just nice mood music in the background. Glad you enjoyed the music and images
  5. Bowsong
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    A most excellent chapter and richly illustrated! I was so glad to read that the ship crossing went without incident (except, of course for the birth of little Van) and now these travelers are safely on their way. Unfortunately, that murderous Nelthas Dareathys is a mere two steps behind them - in their flight! I would love to see your story of this little band of refugees, tribe and family- reach their sanctuary but sadly, I don't think that's gonna happen... and terrible things will. So maybe I'll hold off til' tomorrow to read no. 4. I'll have a box of tissues on stand-by cuz I think I'm gonna need em'. Lovely images, as is always the case- signpost and the foggy scenes. You're a writer that creates great art and you're an artist that writes great stories!
    1. wolfgrimdark
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      Many thanks Bowsong, aye I am afraid part 4 will be a bit on the dark side but I hope you still enjoy the story. Thanks for the kind words on this chapter and I did give them some peace, of sorts, on the ship ride at least!
  6. PatrickTheDM
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    Excellent chapter! The images are very dark and foreboding, especially the near white-out snow shots. Great work Jonathan!
    1. wolfgrimdark
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      Thanks Asa! Glad you enjoyed the chapter and images - I go overboard on the writing most of the time.
    2. PatrickTheDM
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      Nope, not at all, your a novelist. A good one at that!
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    Nice tension building continuation. I loved the music choices. I'm never one to complain about Chris Isaak - that guy sends shivers down my spine, and the second piece did evoke the struggle and hope of Kol, Van and Bron as they trekked through their new exiled 'home'.

    I'm enjoying your take on Nelthas; both working in some of Lia's back story and then expanding on it to make him truly understandable but utterly deplorable... well, to most. I, on the other hand, rather like Netlaths (probably because he reminds me of a certain other Broody assassin... ). But, he's definitely not a good adversary to have - his single minded determination to find them is creepy (not to mention what he did to Raina and her associate... shudder).

    Makes me laugh how you said you spoent so much time on google checking out baby facts - I have to do the same if I want to write about kids! People expect, because i'm female, that I instinctively know about weights of babies and when they're supposed to walk, talk etc, but you know what? I have no freaking clue so it's all gospel from where i'm sitting

    The wolf was just pure Jon - what's a Wolfgrimdark story without a wolf ? I like Kol's explanation that she didn't sense anything otherworldly about him, he's more of a puppet being gently controlled by Hircine rather than His avatar. It'll be interesting to see the Old Wolf when He finally does appear before them. I wonder if He'll have words for Kol at her continued (if only internal) use of the name Van.

    I sense the next chapter will be a big confrontational one....
    1. wolfgrimdark
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      Thanks Jess! Chris Isaak is a bit unusual for me in that I like him ... as he almost has a country feeling to his music

      Glad you are enjoying Nelthas. Trying to make him a believable villain. Cold and remorseless but not blind evil. He doesn't really revel in bloodshed ... although it doesn't bother him either. In his mind death is an escape from life. The main reason he doesn't choose it for himself is his fear/hatred of the Aedra/Daedra and what will happen when he dies. I suspect he just wants to go to the Void.

      He is after the siblings for a few reasons. Biggest is he took a job (even if he hates the employer and now suspects he has become a pawn of the Princes). His reputation is very important to him and he always fulfills his contract. Second to that is he does not like being made a fool of and having a teenager and a young mom outwit him irks him to no end. Lastly he dislikes loose ends. Loose ends have a bad habit of coming back for revenge later on.

      Started the actual writing for the next chapter today. It is all planned out in minute detail - just need to write it down. Then finish the shots and done. Looking forward to it in a way ... while also dreading it at the same time.
  8. Kamikazekossori
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    It was kind of Kolfinna to make sure that Tivela would know her child had been born, news that is sure to make her happy. I see that being near a city with many people had Bron quite unsettled which is understandable for one used to be in a close knit community far from such places, knowing they might be pursued might have had something to do with it as well. Those whispered words Kolfinna spoke to Kavel, how she called him by the name she held in her heart as she did him, were heartwarming. Those moments the twins shared with Raina were amusing with her interest in Bron and her bit of teasing, nice for them to have such moment after that journey by sea and their escape from their home.

    Was very sad that Raina and her fellow workers met such a cruel fate at that cold Nelthas' hands and those of the twisted sorts he hired, they did not deserve such an end, thrown to the water. I see that Nelthas is starting to see who his employer truly is and not liking that one bit, not wanting to be but a tool in a scheme he know little about. That darkness in Nelthas forged by many cruel years shows in that sick pride he had in setting up his trap for the twins.

    I really like the description as Kolfinna though of what the High Shaman could read in the patterns of nature, in the swirl of leaf and in the things strewn about the forest floor. It seems she has some of that skill in the way she sensed something dark approaching in what she saw and she does not seem one to ignore such a warming. Was interesting how Kolfinna had conflicted thoughts about what she would do if she ever returned to Solstheim, knowing that as a shaman she should suggest a peaceful path yet wanting justice for those that were taken away from her, she should be careful about wanting them avenged as such a feeling can be dangerous. I liked that subtlety of Hircine's help to the twins, sending wolves to guide their path. Looks like their is quite the danger ahead for the twins and I wonder how they are going to get through it all. A wonderfully weaved part of the prologue, one filled with emotion and tension, Jonathan

    1. wolfgrimdark
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      Many thanks for checking out the latest story Alexi! Another reason that Kolfinna gave Tivela a note is long range planning. I suspect at some day Kavel will investigate his past at Solstheim. At least now Tivela will recognize his name.

      Now with Raina ... I hated writing that. It is why I am so torn doing dark writing. Your own writing has shown you do not need to have dark, mean, nasty things happening to provide an entertaining story. Grim seemed to settle at some midway point. He had violence and bad things but most of that was to the enemies or his own group ... none of whom ever died and they tended to come out on top in the end. Only a few deaths like Elisha, Tor, Skajldwulf, and maybe one other I can't recall. Having to write such dark stuff goes somewhat against my nature. I know it creates drama and emotional impact but not sure if this is really what I want to write. I just tend to prefer lighter stuff.

      Still I am committed to trying it. So the prologue, at the very least, will be dark and my attempt at doing it. The down side is this - if I find myself so unhappy with writing this dark I will probably give up on it. Which means will I scrub Kavel and start over or just go back to Grim? Not sure. I guess a lot also depends on whether people are enjoying the story or not. I could probably do a more middle ground but the goal was to make Kavel a bit more unique. So in a bit of a quandry at the moment. They are just characters in a story but ... well I hate being mean :p

      Appreciated very much you picking up on the dangers of revenge from Kolfinna. I wasn't sure if anyone else would pick up on that little bit of foreshadowing ... more on that in the next chapter.

      Aye Hircine did send the wolves. The princes in Kavels world are around, very much so, but more subtle and far, far weaker than they are in Grim's world. Oh they are plenty powerful in Oblivion but on Nirn they must do most things through followers, rituals, special summing times/days, etc. I don't want them all powerful and able to solve problems with a wave of their hands. If they appear in mortal form (human or otherwise) then they can be killed like any other mortal. Course it only kills the mortal form and they are sent back to Oblivion where they have to recover for a short time before they can create a new body.

      Anyhow must my thoughts that came to mind reading your comment. Thanks again and do hope you enjoyed the story even if a bit dark.
  9. Amevenastral9
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    I had expected to some degree a thrilling chase as Kol, Brom and baby Kavel made their way to the sanctuary, their every move in the shadow of the Crimson Raven..and that was certainly delivered! But what I had not expected was the beautiful and touching moments between the three as the strong bonded and protected the weak. The small, yet monumental intricacies were spot on and resound even as I write this comment. Your research paid off very well as you told it, one would not at all be surprised that you had not experienced the wonders of a newborn first hand.
    Likewise, was pleasantly surprised to get such an in depth background into Crimson Raven. Cruelty came early for Nelthas and was seemingly relentless. How could he really be anything other than he is without a tremendous internal struggle against all the pain and hatred.. It does evoke pity as at one time he was as innocent as baby Kavel.. People make choices everyday whether to become their experiences or to fight against their hardship and choose a more righteous path. What makes some sink into the bowels and others rise is a good question.. and maybe that is what part Boethia played in some sense?
    Anxious to read the next chapter which I am sure will be rather intense... my emotions are already churned by this series and that is a good thing! Excellent work as always Grim J! A true pleasure to read!
    1. wolfgrimdark
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      Many thanks Ameven. Lol I thought you were going to say I didn't do a chase scene ... as in a way it was a chase but they did in in parallel versus one pursuing the other directly. Glad you enjoyed how I presented it. No newborns here although I had a younger brother so I had a little experience with a newborn in that regard (I was about 10 I think when he was born).

      Bron, Kolfinna, and Kavel are all that is left of the tribe and they are three against the world in some ways. They feel very lost and alone and they know they might be hunted (but don't know for sure hence Kolfinna hasn't been as guarded as Bron, who is more paranoid about it) so they have bonded very close.

      One may wonder what Nelthas would be if he hadn't changed his path that night after talking with Boethiah. Would he have killed himself? Would he have broken and become magically and spiritually bound to his masters will, nothing more than a killing machine? Well he is a killing machine but under his own will ... or at least as much will as any of us have, for certainly free will is partly illusion. We are all products of our experiences, our genes, and our environment ... so how much free will do we really have?

      Anyhow for whatever reason Nelthas blamed the world for much of his problems, and blames the gods for making it that way when they "have" the power to stop it. So he turned inwards and said screw everyone. I will live for me and only me. And so he has.

      Hope you enjoy the next chapter ... going to be a complicated one to write I can tell you that much!
  10. SimClarke
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    it took me awhile to read it all, but at least I learned a lot of new words and terms, such as "papoose", "pout" and "outfoxed". I've already forgot most of them ( ), but thanks anyway, It's still a good training spend some good time reading, listening and watching your work, especially when the text is so well written and fluent as well.
    Love to see Nelthas too, one of my last best discovery.
    1. wolfgrimdark
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      Thanks so much for checking out the story. I know folks have limited time so I am always flattered when someone makes that much effort (and I never expect it either - I respect peoples time very much - my stories are long because that is how I like to write and because I know some of my readers enjoy all the detail and the length).

      Also it as fun knowing which words you had to look up. I try to always work on my vocabulary. Hopefully one or two words might stick with you. Course not sure how often you might need to use those three :-)

      Appreciate the comment and that you thought my story was well written and fluent!