Shadowbane - Part 2

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  1. aok
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    Well you have me hooked! I hope you will continue it!
    Heh heh, the last line...a reminder who the author is!!!
    Brilliant work dear!
  2. pangallosr
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    a quick yank and you have set the hook..... crossing over even with Wolf... fabulous idea.
    the story told by narrative..... I am sure it will eventually change, but provides an easy feeling to it. As if it could be a story told by any number of us. Yet I prefer to you.......

    Keep this going Jess.... your second movie in making
  3. Corfus
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    A very enjoyable read, the lore of werewolfs and that sometimes goes over my head, but your descriptions were good and the images fitted well with the atmosphere. When I think of Solthseim I prefer to still picture the Morrowind version I preferred that to skyrims version for some reason.

    Nice work Jess, sorry for taking so long to getting round to catching up
  4. wolfgrimdark
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    What can I say but it was awesome - biased or not lol. It hadn't been my plan to do any cross-overs with Kavel but in this case it was about as perfect as you could get for a cross-over, very smoothly done (and for anyone else reading this comment I had already given the green light on the idea). Nice to see it all together in the actual story though. Very well done - and indeed lucky they did not stay with the Berhamask tribe considering that happened later (probably that same year).

    Like how you are telling this as well - from a third party narrator who has, so far, remained a somewhat of a mystery other than they are a Dunmer with a few hints on their past. Like the bouncing between view points of the twins as the narrator speaks as well as the information on the tribes on Solstheim. The size of the clan would be a big issue I think as inbreeding would be common and create numerous issues unless fresh blood was brought in. Berhamask had much better relations with the two-legs so I don't think they were hurting as much. Course that is one reason Mora wanted them gone.

    Enjoyed how you are doing the shots - something I borrowed a little in the sense that I can't do as many story shots for the prologue (with some exceptions) so just adding in some general ones.

    That last line though? A foreshadowing of some horror to come? Just a statement on life? Not sure I agree though. It can be tragic (Romeo and Juilet, rejected love, love turned to hate, etc.) but can also be life's greatest joy and reason for existence. Like many things it isn't BW and has many sides to it. But for a dark queen I expect it to be more tragic then not :)
    1. deleted1123719
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      Thanks Jon and deeper thanks for letting me borrow Kolfinna, Bron and Korst to turn up in my story. Their addition greatly helped me to explain how werewolf Dunmer can come to be. I mean, they're not your run of the mill werewolf races! Be nice if the twins cross paths with Kavel in the future and can pass on their gratitude for the help of Bron and Kolf in saving their lives.

      Don't do a lot of writing in the first person and am quite enjoying it but I don't think it's something I'll stick with of their tale goes bigger than a backstory. Same as the shots, I'm enjoying doing random shots that very very loosely match the text, but if I write a bigger story I'll have to go back to matching story and shots again. Just seems like a lot of hard work at the moment.

      Yeah that last line is signature queen of mean! You know me, I have to have some angst in my works. But as for me, I believe in the good of true love too. Just maybe not in this case
  5. AmadanBezerk
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    Inbreeding indeed creates madness, deformities, and all kinds of other genetic "curses"....just look at Game of Thrones for a perfect example....^^
    I'm taking a wild guess that Klepstein was kinda like Joffrey....

    A merchant in Raven Rock, who's sister was mauled to death, the sister's infant kids vanished....Bron revealed the 'Joffrey-like' psycho-enraged^^ Klep's looooong deception for all....busted!
    The inbred Klep was then promptly sent to the Hunting Grounds to 'calm him down', and to avenge the twins and their mom as well. ^^

    A well-deserved death for murdering a mother, then taking her baby twins and giving them Hircine's curse at such a young age.
    May Hircine now have plenty of "fun" with Klep's putrid soul in the Hunting Grounds for all eternity!

    BTW: I love those big Blood Moons in your first and second-last shots. ^^

    Endorsed.
    Warm thanks and cheers, dear!

    1. deleted1123719
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      Thanks hon! Haha, loved your GoT comparisons. There's certainly some dangers in inbreeding, madness being one of them perhaps that was Klepstein's trouble all along. Anyway, he got his and with the help of Wolfgrimdark's troup of werebears and the Dunmer narrator, the twins ended up in a better place.

      The ENB I use is solely responsible for those awesome moons and is part of the inspiration for me to play weres (well, that and the fun of ripping out throats! )

      Cheers
  6. Nataly1q2w3e4r5t
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    This is awesome continuation of twins tale, wonderfully written! Great shots too, very expressive and with incredible atmosphere. Twins seem to have very hard life being in pack, guess with only two of then the survival became much easier... Also it was very interesting to know the details of life in different clans of werewolves and heartwarming to see lovely Kolfinna and brave Bron making an appereance from Kavel's tales.

    Seems like Brana had not been tormented as much as his sister who was nearly turned into breding mare... but thanks to really messed up interbreeding way and her generics she doesn't have a dozen of kids by now. I think that when she and her brother dealt with Klepstein it was very fitting revenge... only too bad that the tins did not leave clan earlier. Seems like declining Kolfinna's offer has saved twins lives, given what happened with her tribe later...
    I would look forward for continuation and thank you for sharing your wonderful work!
    1. deleted1123719
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      Thanks Nataly! It was very nice to be able to bring Wolfgrimdark's already fleshed out characters into this backstory to help breathe life into my twins. Whether they will appear again is up to the Gods (and Jon ).

      It was a rough start for the twins but through the their adversity and hardships, they have had each other, and this is going to be a continuous and strong theme through the the twins' lives.
  7. Kamikazekossori
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    I really liked your description of the twins, Brana being the more serious of the two with smiles rarely appearing on his face, Liesi being one with a natural gentleness, the wolf beyond her crimson eyes only appearing when she is angered, that contrast of personalities though they share a fierce side makes them all the more interesting.

    The twins certainly had a tough past among a pack lead by a lying Alpha, one whose leadership needed to be brought to an end for what he had done to the mother of the twins, the truth revealed to them by ones they had though foes through lies told to them, a familiar were-bear bringing proof that Alpha could not deny.

    That link with the tale of Kavel is really great, explains something of that animosity between the tribes, that not all were at odds with the twins finding unlikely friends. I am quite curious about that the dunmer telling their tale, with but a few hints revealed about him. Wonderful work, Jess
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      Thanks Alexi. I often wonder about the nature vs nurture / genes vs environment psychological debate and these two would seem to be evidence towards the nature side of things; retaining something of a gentle spirit despite the upbringing in that pack where they would've been reminded of their submissive place constantly. One wonders what their mother and father must have been lie. I'd hazard a guess at very decent people.

      I'm very grateful that Wolfgrimdark let me borrow a bit of his universe for the purpose of my story; sure helped me in figuring out how to explain Dunmer werewolves! Whether or not the stories will intertwine in the future... who knows!!
  8. Liadys
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    Awesome second part ! Nicely woven with Wolf's prologue to Kavel's story as well. It was great to find out more about the twin's past, how Brana is the more serious and grim looking one while Liesi is much more gentler yet both of them still harbor a very feral nature as well.
    I guess the fact they were " acquired" by nords explain the more nordic names...sounds more like the Alpha acquired them like slaves and not like fellow pack members.....the whole inbreeding thing to keep the line pure...*shudder*

    and that last line....oh boy....what have you in store for us!?
    1. deleted1123719
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      Thanks Lia! Yes you don't often come across Dunmer with good Ol Nord names like Brana and Liesi. I wonder what their reals names were? Maybe one day they'll travel back to Solthseim to find their Aunt and learn what their real names actually were.

      In store? Oh you know me, a little bit of angst, a little bit of misery
  9. wadelycan
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    Quite an awesome job with the cross-over prologues with this story and Kavel's. Not even to the main story yet and I'm already glad someone is dead (Klepstein). I wonder if Hirsine will bring them together again with Bron, Kolfinna, and baby Kavel when they reach the sanctuary. I'm sure these two will have to deal with the Crimson Raven as well.

    .........that is of course if you are motivated to write the story
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      Thanks Wade. Yeah, I tend to make characters that create strong feelings in my readers (mostly hatred). Wolfgrimdark's backstory for Kavel was just too tempting to pass up on when I wanted to make some weres out of Solthseim. I'm just glad he let me barge into his world as for motivated in continuing their story, haven't decided yet...
  10. gucky2010
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    You saved Day my with your great Part 2 of Shadowbanes Backstory.Excellent Work Jess
    1. frank213
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      I can only agree
    2. deleted1123719
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      Thanks fellas