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Phoenix Burning - Chapter One - Errand Boys

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  1. User_6005213
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    Great story and work on it and on the facial expressions, Jess !
    1. deleted1123719
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      Thanks Simon - it's a labour of love
  2. pangallosr
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    that's some fine writing there Jess...... so sorry have been away for, what, nearly a year. But a grand way to begin reading your stories once again.
    Boy does that Adonato know how to keep putting his foot in his mouth..... lol
    now on to the next chapter.....
    really great shots too
    1. deleted1123719
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      Hehe, I know, where does the time fly eh? Many thanks hon and yep, Adonato isn't too bright about playing in the big leagues!
  3. aok
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    WooHoo!!!! Here we go!!!!!
    I am sooooooooo happy to see this work starting up again!!!!
    Well now my first observation is that this Adonato is an idiot. Rathe and Quin would be doing the future a favor by eliminating this clown from the gene pool.
    Secondly, the Night Mother sent BOTH of then to kill a bard??? There is definitely a lot more to this then what appears on the surface!
    Can't wait to see what it is!
    Wonderful work hon!
    1. deleted1123719
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      Thanks dear and I'm glad you've enjoyed Broody's return to the Nexus! Leoteli isn't really much of a representative for writers now is he I probably should've thought about that when I was writing him

      Thanks again sweet!
  4. Bowsong
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    Yes, here we go! and since it's sunday and my "play-day", I finally have a chance to catch up on all things Skyrim. And that definitely includes "Mr (<3) Broody!" Lookin' good Jess!!! Pssst' hey Rathe... trust no one!)
    1. deleted1123719
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      Hehe, thanks hon! Glad you're enjoying the return of Broody. Yeah, he doesn't trust anyone alright... except maybe Quin... Which is probably not a wise move...
  5. AmadanBezerk
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    ....and another intriguing plot starts to thicken like the rib-sticking moose stew in their bowls....^^

    Why am I just as suspicious as "Joker"?
    This contract already smells dodgy and it hasn't even been started yet!
    Quin certainly enjoyed playing little attitude and mind games with their nervous client, didn't he?

    The Night Mother commanded BOTH of them for this mission?
    Maybe she might just be arranging something "special" for Quin, and that might bode VERY ill for him, as the Night Mother is NOT stupid and VERY little can be concealed from her....
    Quin better watch very carefully which Deity he p*sses off....

    BTW: Why would Quin care about the Night Mother and her "whims" when his alignment is definitely with ANOTHER certain Deity in the first place? hmmm....

    Endorsed.
    Many thanks and cheers, dear!
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      Very good observations most especially your point in the BTW comment.... why WOULD Quin care about the Night Mother's whims?? You just keep pondering...

      Glad you enjoyed the lads' return to the Nexus and it was fun writing about a writer (a neurotic, anxious, underhanded writer... why does that sound so familiar? )

      Thanks hon.
  6. bits01
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    You write very well - that's it really (no point in analyzing). Will come back. Greetings from the Lowlands.
    1. deleted1123719
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      Hehehe, short and simple and very sweet. Thanks hon.
  7. MsFrankenstein
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    *Hops up and down*

    Finally!
    1. deleted1123719
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      Haha, thanks Jo!
    2. MsFrankenstein
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      I'm still busy with Oblivion, enjoying it much more than Skyrim atm!

      I'm almost tempted to go writing now but too much effort for me!
  8. Rincevent69
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    Well done Jess! Nice story and song!
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      Thanks hon!
  9. Heaventhere
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    So the bad boy returns, in all his glory, as handsome and confusing as ever, as I waked the story go by the words making the images flow though my mind I often have wondered what he thinks as he sits so calm and seemly unfeeling. I think my favorite shot is the 4th one down. His face masked in the darkness, just on eye on Adonato, the other hidden under his hood, no sign of what he thinks but for the tone of his voice, which I can hear as I read ..... deep, smooth, very dangerous, his voice low letting his body say as much as the words do. Rathe looks great as always, but still each time I see him I think of that face as he watched Fleur in those last moments.... still think what could have been for him.

    I must say I read the comments first as always of course after the story lol........... and when reading your comment to Jon, I wondered how you like fitting the images to the story, how I have always wrote. I have the vision, that image in my head of where I want the story to go and sit and write it then take the shots to match , always have, I have tried it the other way but find the vision is not there for me that way. Of course sometime must rewrite a bit as some shots prove impossible to get but not often.

    Amazing shots to go with this chapter........ Quinn well that man is up to something and wonder who will come out on top, he is a sneaky, lying sack of well........ not my favorite person lol can you tell.......... but he is an handsome devil but a devil none the less!!
    1. deleted1123719
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      thanks hon! I think if there's one person in the world who loves Rathe more than me, it has to be you!! I'm glad you enjoyed the bad boy's return and I think how you have him talk and act in your head is very similar to how I see him too (we do like our bad boys don't we? )!

      I really can't write to images anymore. I have to write first then try and fit the images to the story... as you said, it just doesn't feel natural anymore to write to images!

      Quin... well. He's an odd one, that's for sure. Not too bad on the eyes but next to Broody I can't even look at him! I'm a bit biased.
  10. Farvat
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    Ah! An amazing return! I really like the general atmosphere, the dialogues, all is wonderful written and fantastic images too. I love the work of Jonathan as i love your works too. Really compliment for you choice to continue the amazing story of.. mr... Broody and his hood.
    1. deleted1123719
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      Many thanks Farv dear! It means a lot to me that such a prolific writer as yourself holds my work not only in high esteem but up there with Wolfgrimdark's! I truly appreciate your kind words and there will be plenty more Broody to come!