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   zeroxee

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   23 November 2013, 7:43PM

   Aah what beauty can do... hehe
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   Heaventhere

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   13 October 2013, 11:03AM

   Sorry did not post when I endorsed dang 502 is killing me this weekend. Great shots, love how she tells of the beauty drawing her to this woman, that the inner beauty is what she see's ... great tale jess...
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      15 October 2013, 12:16PM

      Ugh those 502 errors...
      Thanks dear!
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   aok

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   13 October 2013, 6:02AM

   Lovely!
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      15 October 2013, 12:15PM

      Thanks dear!
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   13 October 2013, 12:25AM

   she is a beauty, great job
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      13 October 2013, 4:06AM

      Thanks Ron, glad you like her!
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   SydneyB

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   12 October 2013, 6:12PM

   Great words and shots, Jess
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      13 October 2013, 4:05AM

      Thanks sweetie!
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   Kamikazekossori

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   12 October 2013, 5:19PM

   She describes Saadia's beauty so intensely, that earthy hue of her skin, that blue of her eyes, those scars that only make her more beautiful, that musk among the smell of washed linen, really does wake the emotions that way she sees her, that it moved her to help and I agree with Cael that is is as if one can hear her voice in one's head reading those words ^^
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      13 October 2013, 4:05AM

      Thankyou Kami dear! I've learnt from the best when it comes to descriptive writing (ie, you!!)
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   Caelrya

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   12 October 2013, 1:46PM

   Dammit! I've got goosebumps! O.O
   You have that rare skill to desribe things so.. I dunno. Like I can hear her voice in my head.
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      13 October 2013, 4:05AM

      Aw, thanks hon! That's so sweet.
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   Nataly1q2w3e4r5t

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   12 October 2013, 12:29PM

   That was amazing, awesomely written piece with very atmospheric shots! Kayol has nailed it perfectly, how many emotions of Asha you can give us by only a few paragraphs, that is plain amazing, I applaud your writing skills! Seems like Asha has something human in her after all, for Sadia's beauty has affected her. Before it, only seeing sunset has managed to awoke something in her heart too, so I suppose it means Asha is not indifferent to any kind of beauty and I am looking forward to see what will happen next and where the road will lead her.
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      13 October 2013, 4:04AM

      Thanks sweets! Yes I think Skyrim is starting to get under her skin! I too look forward to seeing what comes next
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   12 October 2013, 9:23AM

   absolutely amazing Jess
   
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      13 October 2013, 4:04AM

      Thanks Frank!
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    Kayol

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    12 October 2013, 9:13AM

    It was so... sensual. I envy you your skills, hon, I was never able to write in a serious manner about beauty. It always turns out to be somehow funny or sarcastic. Maybe that's because I try to avoid calling my characters beautiful? I don't know...
    But you don't want to hear my brooding, you want an opinion on the installment! It was plain amazing, I am shocked how many pieces of information, emotions and even suspence you can give us by only a few paragraphs! I hereby name you a Wordsmith, my dear. Now I'll just hide in my corner and be jealous.
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       13 October 2013, 4:03AM

       Oh, i'm now really blushing!! Thank Kay honey!