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   zeroxee

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   24 October 2013, 7:16PM

   Wow.. what a tale.. intriguing!
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   fatamus

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   11 October 2013, 6:47AM

   Dear Diary,
   Yes it's me again, you must remember to tell me to read to me the rest of this story..
   Nice Shots Great story line
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      Heaventhere

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      11 October 2013, 4:26PM

      Thank you so much fatamus, I will be sure to make sure Ambrosia tells the rest of this story.
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   frank213

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   10 October 2013, 1:08PM

   brilliant work Shelley.
   I am very impressed
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      Heaventhere

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      11 October 2013, 4:25PM

      Thank you so much frank, so glad u enjoyed
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   deleted1123719

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   09 October 2013, 10:27AM

   Nice work Heaven! Nice to see another person put down Alain Dufont (evil dog that he is)!
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      Heaventhere

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      09 October 2013, 5:00PM

      Thank you jess, yes a very bad man he was!
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   Kayol

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   09 October 2013, 4:58AM

   And now the diary... that's very interesting way of portraying your character and showing her thoughts. Also the fact that the images were shot from the frist person view matches the idea so greatly! Awesome work!
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      Heaventhere

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      09 October 2013, 5:43AM

      Thank you so much, I love to write in first person, I am so glad you enjoyed.
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   RONALD15

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   09 October 2013, 1:01AM

   Great story heaven
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      Heaventhere

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      09 October 2013, 5:42AM

      Thank you so much hon, am so glad you enjoyed.
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   buttnine

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   08 October 2013, 1:17PM

   Great narrative and excellent shots! Very impressive work!
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      Heaventhere

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      08 October 2013, 10:44PM

      Thank you so much buttnine, am very glad you enjoyed and for the very nice comment!
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   mymajestymv

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   08 October 2013, 10:30AM

   awww, loved this story-style! POV is always cool to read, hon lovely 'dark' work.))
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      Heaventhere

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      08 October 2013, 10:43PM

      Thank you so much hon, I love POV...
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   AmadanBezerk

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   07 October 2013, 11:12PM

   A way-cool, "first-person" style story.
   Whatever that annoying "weakness" is, your character had best resolve it quickly....she got into a few nasty and narrow scrapes there against both Falmer and Dwemer Automatons because of it....
   Endorsed. Warm and kind thanks for this entertaining tale, Heaven, and cheers!
   
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      Heaventhere

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      08 October 2013, 12:25AM

      Thank you so much for the wonderful comment and the endorsement, I do agree it is past time for her look for this voice and find out what is needed to fix this!!
      
      I am so very glad you enjoyed I love to write in first person..
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    kowalski99

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    07 October 2013, 10:33PM

    Not bad,not bad.
    Me like it very much...
    
    
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       Heaventhere

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       07 October 2013, 10:56PM

       Thank you so much Kowalski !