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   deleted1123719

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   28 July 2013, 12:10PM

   Thank you so much for comments and endorses my lovelies! I really do appreciate the feedback!
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   bison1967

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   11 August 2013, 11:50AM

   An epic cliffhanger! Brilliant writing and beautifully detailed imagery, Jess! =)
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   AmadanBezerk

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   02 August 2013, 10:22PM

   They make a great team! Her wicked and sometimes totally raunchy creativity with words just left Rathe speechless, and me lmao! I loved that!
   In combat, he can draw the nasties' attention, and lure them right into hidden Fleur's sights: "bullseye"!
   That is great teamwork, as their enemies will literally never know what hit 'em.
   
   I like the satisfying rage he got from smashing all that "liquid evil"....a small but cathartic emotional vengeange for what that stuff did to his dad.
   Great episode, Jess! Endorsed.
   Kind thanks and cheers, dear!
   
   
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   zeroxee

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   30 July 2013, 7:27PM

   Yea.. "i'm" popular... hahahaaa xD *joke*
   
   Damn.. you're good at cliffhangers... will go to next chapter quickly now!
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   Caelrya

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   28 July 2013, 11:36AM

   Cliffhanger...! *rushes off to the next chapter*
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   papp263

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   28 July 2013, 5:04AM

   Gah! Left on a cliff hanger!.... Just getting good then BAM! lol Tune in next time for another installment... lol
   Excellent work! And cant wait for more!
   Endorsed
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   aok

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   28 July 2013, 12:42AM

   Heh heh, Loved the way Fleur dealt with the first guard! Clever girl!
   Great chapter!
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   Kamikazekossori

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   27 July 2013, 4:10PM

   I really liked that small detail of both Rathe and Fleur being glad Tormir and her daughter were not awake as they left, avoiding teary eyes and judging gazes, the task ahead weighing on them as it did. Your description of the golden forests of the rift was so beautiful, the different hues of the leaves, the light filtering through them, I can almost smell that pungent odor of the wet earth, reminds me of walks I have done in the forest near where I live ^^ The description of the difference in sound between the two as they make their way along the leafy ground was so amusing. Fleur does come up with good plans, avoiding killing when it is wise to do so, I like Rathe's reaction to her having that flask of skooma, always carrying those useful objects and quite good in creating a story for the two of them, a great actor she is. Seems blood soon spilled as they entered that den, the name of it seems awfully fitting, I wonder what the darker hall hold for the duo, very intriguing, Jess
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   27 July 2013, 2:54PM

   What a wonderful chapter, oh the line about the threesome, I was laughing so hard, she is growing every day in to that strong woman she is going to become and Rathe had better hold cause this woman is going to be more then a match for him. When he heard her call him love you could feel his heart flutter with excitement. I love the shots so fitting!! Cant wait for next part!!
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    27 July 2013, 1:00PM

    Love the main image! Just wow!
    ...I added this story to my browser favorites to read it later.
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    Nataly1q2w3e4r5t

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    27 July 2013, 11:59AM

    Strange, I've just written the comment but it has mysteriously disappeared...
    Anyway, I can say it again, awesome new installment, wonderfully written and with fantastic shots! The descriptions of beautiful scenery near Riften were awesome, very beautiful reelecting its serenity of ever autumn and in contrast with it, the dark and dreary place where Rath and Fleur have arrived. Fleur seemed to listen to Nazir's words of wisdom carefully, showing a sly and cunning but bloodless approach to that den of skooma, Rathe sure was impressed by her witty way of thinking. They both so wonderfully complete one another, Rathe with his awesome battle skills and menacing aura and lovely Fleur with her witty and stealthy approach to every situation and careful planning. I've smiled when she called Rathe her "love", I know it was for the ruse but Fleur is Fleur and she doesn't waste words for nothing and I am glad Rathe had immediately noticed this. Her joke about threesome was unexpected but amusing, I was surprised as Rathe, for I didn't expect something like this from cute innocent Fleur but she had in her - an ability to surprise. Now the new dangers lie ahead of them, but I think that together they do make a great team and they may finally discover albino whereabouts... I am very intrigued to see what will happen next, especially since latest teaser... Thank you for sharing your wonderful work!