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   bison1967

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   20 April 2013, 11:13PM

   An excellent chapter, jessb! Intense, funny and always interesting! Love the imagery that also accompanies this wonderful and intriguing tale! =)
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      21 April 2013, 7:27AM

      Thanks my friend!
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   zeroxee

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   18 April 2013, 8:40PM

   Phew.. maybe it was luck.. maybe not but i dont think it would've ended good if that Veteran lad had noticed Quin who he really was.. what had happened then! Well done, Jess!
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      21 April 2013, 7:27AM

      Thanks zero!
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   hitmaqn78

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   18 April 2013, 12:23PM

   Amazing work, my friend!
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      21 April 2013, 7:26AM

      Thanks dear!
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   Nataly1q2w3e4r5t

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   17 April 2013, 10:05AM

   Fantastic shots, so beautiful and atmospheric with great expression and awesome new chapter, so beautifully written! It seems that Quin not entirely sincere answer of the reason why he is staying with Kyra has made their relationship more complicated, not to mention unending Azgrak's frustration toward the fact that handsome archer is still tugging along with them. The exchange between him ad Quin, especially of how to make him unrecognizable was hilarious and made me chuckle, revealing the fact that Azgrak never got past his jealousy. The scene in the camp was very emotional, especially Kyra and Quin exchange of words, he is right, that she wasn't on the war and didn't see that butchery but she is also a Dragonborn, not some scared woman, so she can defend herself if necessarily. Azgrak did such a good thing to draw the attention of imperials to himself, he is doing this for Kyra I think, he doesn't want her to get into trouble. Such a devoted and caring person Azrgak is, Kyra is lucky to have him as a friend and soulmate.
   I am looking forward to see their next adventure and thank you very much for sharing your wonderful work! .
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      17 April 2013, 12:20PM

      Thanks dear Nat! You're so insightful! You really read the scene so well! Poor Kyra, sometimes she gets so frustrated being stuck between the two of them! Chapter 3 brewing away in my brain!
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      Nataly1q2w3e4r5t

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      17 April 2013, 1:11PM

      You you are welcome, I love to read about your awesome characters, they are so fleshed out! Poor Kyra indeed, sometimes I have a feeling that if she will leave two boys alone, it will result in nasty and messy fight, where Azgrak will sure try to "remake" Quin's look so nobody will recognize him ever again. And I am very glad to see that the next chapter may come soon, I am very intrigued to see how the relationship between characters will change and grow.
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      17 April 2013, 11:03PM

      Thanks dear!
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   Kamikazekossori

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   17 April 2013, 5:16AM

   That banter among the trio is fantastic, always enjoy the barbs Quin and Azgrak exchange, the part with Quin saying how unforgettable his face is and Az's offer to make him less recognizable really made me chuckle, luckily as ever Kyra can calm them when they get a little too enthusiastic. Kyra has quite the presence and speaks with such confidence, that Legate found himself quickly outmatched, Quin's comment afterwards and Kyra's snort of laughter was so cute. It is funny how quickly Quin forgot he should keep attention away from him, talking excitedly as he was to the young soldiers, once a leader always a leader I guess. Those words Kyra and Quin shared near the end about him having seen him and the darkness in his eyes is quite intriguing, I very much look forward to the next installment of the tale
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      17 April 2013, 8:18AM

      Thanks dear, I too had a laugh writing this one - Az and Quin just crack me up together; they really write their own story!
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      17 April 2013, 8:21AM

      Also, I love writing the complex relationship between Kyra and Quin so you'll see more of that in chapters to come!
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   aok

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   17 April 2013, 7:34AM

   Great work! Amazing development of your characters personalities.
   As Kami mentioned I too loved Azgrak's offer to make Quin unrecognizable! LMAO!
   Awesome series!
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      17 April 2013, 8:19AM

      Thanks my friend! Made me lmao too!
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   17 April 2013, 4:40AM

   My dear, you never cease to impress me. Continue on, I really loved this chapter
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      17 April 2013, 8:16AM

      Thanks King - that's so lovely!