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Kavel Book 1 - Bloodmoon Born - Prologue Part 4

Previous Chapter: Prologue Part 3.

From the Annuals of Kavel Bloodmoon as told by WolfGrimDark. For more great stories on Nexus check out the Nexus Writers List.

PDF Version: Trying something new and providing Kavel’s stories in PDF format.

A repeat but it fit too well not to use.



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Bron scratched his nose and sniffed at the air. His senses seemed dull and his mind clouded. Most likely from a lack of sleep he thought. At least that was until he noticed the faint wisps of fog that that was creeping along the ground like a snake sinuously gliding through the grass. His heart began to thump in his chest as he realized he couldn’t reach his bear spirit. It was as if his beast soul had fallen asleep and refused to awaken. He knew this feeling for he had felt it before; when his tribe had been attacked by the Hand.

Fear induced adrenaline coursed through his body as he moved quickly to Kolfinna’s side and roused her. She opened groggy eyes that widened in concern as she saw the fear and anger in Bron’s face.

“They found us Kol! The Hand, they are here. I can’t change!” Bron stuttered out as frustrated tears moistened his eyes. “Why are they doing this Kol? I don’t understand. Why won’t they just leave us alone?! We never harmed anyone, we just want to be left on our own.”

Kol knew she must act but she used a precious moment to lay the back of her hand softly against Bron’s face, the early stubble of a beard brushing against her skin as he tilted his head towards her. “We have become trapped in a war between the Princes, brother. Mora declared war against Hircine because Mora wants Solstheim for himself. That is why our tribe was destroyed. The Knowledge Hoarder wants to remove Hircine’s influence.”

Bron pulled back, his face incensed at this revelation, but there was no time for more questions. “Kol, I can’t summon my bear form! What can we do? Why haven’t they attacked?” The last question he asked nervously as he looked out into the fog filled night. Dawn was not far away but the light was not yet good enough for him to see through the fog and trees.



Kolfinna considered the question while she made sure Kavel was securely strapped to her back. Looking around she surveyed the area. The spell-fog was dampening her ability to connect to the spirit world but she was at least able to make out the soul energy of their enemies in the distance. She motioned to Bron to follow her behind a tree as they crouched down low.

“I suspect they are waiting for their cursed charm to fully activate. They do not want to risk fighting us in our bear forms. I sense them out there. They are moving slowly as if they are trying to avoid detection. They have us surrounded and I suspect if we try to run they would charge us, bear form or not. It means we have only a few precious minutes to act.” Kolfinna explained as she begin pulling out one of her rare herbs, one that would alter her senses and boost her connection to the spirit realm, and began to chew it.

Bron nodded, his hands gripped tight around his twin axes, as he stared out into the night. He was filled with fear but he would fight to the death to protect his family. “Do you have a plan then?” He asked as he noticed her sit down cross legged as if to enter a trance.

She nodded back, her mind already working on her spell as she explained. “Ever since that night I have pondered how this spell of theirs works. It seems to dampen our ability to connect to the beast spirit inside of us. As you know all werebeasts have an animal spirit inside of them The blood is just the physical aspect of Hircine’s blessing. It is the spirit that allows us to transform and connects us to the beast within. That is why those born with the blood have more control, they grow up with their spirit. Those who catch the blood magic later in life often can’t handle the shock and lack the control to manage their own instincts and emotions combined with that of a beast.”

Kolfinna paused for a moment as she took a deep breath and summoned her power. “This fog seems weaker than before. I think I have a way to break through it, at least for a few minutes, but the risk is very high brother.”

“What is it that you need from me Kol? What risk could possibly be more than what we face now?” Bron asked impatiently.

“Your bear spirit is asleep and we must awaken it. To fight this spell it will require strong emotion and the only one I can think of is rage. I will use the same magic that our best warriors use to enter a berserker state. They train for years to control the rage, to use its energy against their enemies. You lack their training Bron. The risk is that you may become lost in your rage and become rogue. The beast inside of you will take over.”

Bron hesitated for a moment, he knew what she meant. But what choice did he have? He was a passable fighter at best and he lacked the strength of a full grown man. Only in his bear form did he truly stand a chance. Even if his only goal was to break through the attackers so they could escape the trap.

“It is a risk I must take Kol. What other choice do we have?”

Kol nodded sadly; he was right. They had no other options.



It only took a moment. She reached out and placed both hands on her brothers head. Entering her trance she dove deep into his mind. She saw his soul and that of his bear, so intertwined they might as well have been a single entity. Many thought werebeasts violent and uncontrolled, blaming it on the beast blood. Yet the animal spirit that existed inside each werecreature had the same emotions and instincts as its namesake, no more violent or aggressive than its living version. It was the mix of animal and human instincts that often caused a lack of control. A control she now meant to threaten in her own brother.

Steeling herself she used her own anger and thirst for vengeance to power her spell as she stirred the wrath of both Bron’s soul and that of his spirit animal. She did her best to provoke the anger from a desire to protect; like that of a she-bear protecting its cub. It was her hope this might enable him to keep enough control of his own mind.

She knew it was done when she felt Bron pull away from her hands and let out a tremendous shot of such ferocity that it sent shivers down her own spine. She heard cries from the woods and then a loud refined voice of their leader ordering the attack.



Nelthas waited with his two best men in the middle of the pass that led over the mountain and to the grotto. Most likely his prey would try to flee this way, for it was the closest path to their sanctuary, and he wanted to take them on himself. The remaining Silver Hand he had sent sneaking through the woods to surround the brother and sister. They had debated peppering the area with arrows but the darkness and trees meant a hit was unlikely. Plus Nelthas knew the magic of the shamans and even an apprentice could cast a simple wind charm that make arrows largely ineffective. No, it had to be melee. He had activated the hagraven fetish but the head seemed slow and sluggish, something his employer had warned him might happen. The more older the blood the less powerful the spell. Everything was ready now, the men wore were just waiting for his signal to attack. Light had begun to creep over the horizon, making it possible to see some of the details below the pass.



“This one thinks your spell has failed Nelthas. The male one … it has changed.” The Khajiit said calmly, no trace of fear in his voice for he was a seasoned warrior of the Silver Hand.

A second later the werebears howl echoed through the mountain side but the fetish dampened the effects of its fear inducing terror. Only a few of the Hand dropped to their knees, cowering while the rest gritted their teeth and focused on fighting off the effect.

The only apparent reaction by Nelthas was a narrowing of his eyes as he strengthened his mental defenses. It was time to order the attack. “ATTACK! Anyone who lets them break through the line shall die by my own hand!”



The first wave of men that charged set off the shamanesses frost traps. Too weak to kill they still managed to immobilize three of the men and the fourth had his throat ripped out by Bron’s six inch ebony hard claws. With another guttural roar he charged into battle, his eyes red with rage as spittle flew from his cavernous jaws. To Bron it was like riding a log flowing down river during a spring thaw. All he wanted to do was kill, shred, and maim everything in his path. He didn’t bother wasting useless effort trying to control his himself as he knew it was a lost battle. Instead he used what little mental clarity he had left to constantly reinforce his prime directive - to protect Kolfinna and little Kavel. Beyond that nothing mattered anymore.



Kolfinna, standing behind and a little off to the side of Bron, summoned the cold chilling wind spirits of the mountains and bid them to divert any arrows that may come their way. Bron was bleeding from a dozen wounds but fortunately none of these mercenaries had the poisoned weapons used before. Still the silver blades prevented his regenerative abilities from working and all those little wounds were sapping his strength; they had to flee before he collapsed.

When the next ebb in the battle occurred Kolfinna looked around. Blood, flesh and bone were splattered around the once pristine white snow. Light was appearing on the horizon basking the battle field in an eerie pale glow that mingled with the fog, creating a nightmarish dreamscape. Bron let out another bone chilling howl as he looked for his next victim. Behind them she saw the attackers had regrouped and they were getting ready to charge. Ahead of her lay the mountain pass and freedom. If only they could get past the dark soul she sensed guarding it.

She used the last of her magic to summon a powerful frost blast that the wind sent blowing into the charging fighters. Then, praying there was enough of Bron left to understand he needed to follow, she ran for the pass. Her brother sniffed at her and then got down on all fours and charged ahead of her, knowing deep inside it was his duty to protect this frail two-legged creature.



When they reached the narrowest part of the pass she finally met the architect of their misfortune, a strikingly handsome looking Dunmer male. He had an arrogant smirk on his face, his stance ready for battle. In one hand he held a menacing looking blade etched in runes that dripped with green poison. In his other was an ebony black dagger that glowed with a deep red light. At his left and right hand side stood two men. One a slim but deadly looking Khajiit with a large sword at the ready. On his other side stood a massive Orsimer wielding a two-handed ax.

For a second she and the Dunmer locked eyes, his mocking as he gave her a slight bow of the head, hers filled with loathing at the one who helped orchestrate the downfall of her tribe. Then the moment was broken as Bron lost all vestige of control and charged them. His enormous mass barreled into them and only the Dunmer was agile enough of too dodge out of the way. The Khajiit almost made it but Bron’s shoulder careened into his side and sent him flying. The Orsimer was not so lucky. Before he could block with his ax, Bron’s claws and teeth wore ripping his chest and throat to shreds.



Fear in her eyes Kol saw the Khajiit coming around to thrust his sword into the distracted Bron, his berserker fury making him blind to danger. While her magic was drained she had other resources. She grabbed a potion vial from her pouch and threw it at the warrior. It shattered upon hitting his armor and fiery liquid splashed everywhere burning fur and leather. It was not enough to seriously hurt him, thanks to his armor, but it distracted him long enough for Bron to notice him.

Then she let out a startled cry as she realized the Dunmer had snuck around and was almost on her; too late she realized he had used his own men as a distraction. As he brought his sword thrusting in for a killing blow something leapt from the ledge above. Just as the sword tip bit into her gut their wolfish guide crashed into the assassin, sending them both to the ground. While wolf and Dunmer struggled to gain an advantage she turned to help Bron, only it was too late.



His many wounds had caught up with him. His great form lay toppled across the dead body of the Khajiit, the warriors sword sticking out of Bron’s back where he had fallen on it in his rage to rip the man’s heart out. Time seemed to stop as she ran over but her shaman senses had already told her his body was too far gone. His form shimmered before her and as she knelt at his side she saw her brothers sweet face one last time. His eyes opened for a moment and he coughed up blood as he tried to speak.

“Kol … forgive me. I failed you.”

Eyes wet with tears, Kol kissed his bloody forehead and whispered, “Never brother. You could never fail me.” And then he died.

Her heart breaking she took a shuddering breath. She wanted nothing more than to die with him. Her stomach burned from the wound the Dunmer had given her. It was only a nick but the poison was already burning away at her skin. She had suffered so much and she just wanted the pain to end. Yet she felt the life of her child on her back and knew there was still one who depended on her, one who needed her strength now more than ever. So she turned her back on her dead brother and ran for safety.

Tears streaming from her face she raced with all the strength of a mother protecting her only child. She stumbled, and almost fell, when a dark shape sped past her. Covered in blood her wolf guide dashed ahead; one ear torn off and missing its tail. It turned to look back at her, as if to say follow, and then scurried down the trail. Kolfinna followed as quickly as she could, her feet skidding on loose rocks and dirt as she half-ran, half-slid down the path. Her side ached as if on fire but she dared not stop to treat it. She could sense the grotto now, it was very close. It gave her new strength and she managed to sprint the last few yards to the entrance.

Despair hit her as she saw the closed entrance to the grotto. Then to her amazement the crack widened to allow the wolf entrance. Kol ran up and saw there was now room for her to squeeze through the opening. Without a thought she followed the wolf into the grotto and, when she looked back over her shoulder, noticed the entrance had closed behind her. She had done it, she had reached safety for her and her son. But the cost! Oh my poor brave Bron she thought as she whispered sadly, “You didn’t fail me brother, we made it.”



Nelthas cursed in his native tongue as he snapped his dislocated shoulder back into place. That damnable wolf had done a number on him. Only his armor and quick reflexes had saved him from any serious wounds, even though his shoulder wished to argue that assessment. Of the twelve Silver Hand who had started the mission only four of them remained and none of them were happy.

“Your fetish failed Nelthas and most of us our dead. We want out of this mission.” One of the braver ones said as he spat in his direction.

Nelthas ignored him as he shrugged his shoulder making sure he had set it correctly. Then he turned his gaze on the man and it was not a pleasant one.

“The only way out of this mission is victory or death. We still have a chance of victory, which means you all might live. But know this. If you desert now I will hunt you all down one by one and I can promise you that your death at my hands will make you wish you had stayed a thousand times over.”

The were-hunters glared at him but he noticed none of them turned around to leave. The brave one spat again, his face filled with anger. “And just how likely is our chance of success when that girl turns into a monster to protect her son? About as likely as a skeever caught in a mammoth stampeded, that’s what.”



Nelthas snorted dismissively, “Only a fool would give up now that we are so close. The fetish was weak because the blood was weak; it was old and stale.” He pointed at Bron, “But now? Now we have fresh strong blood for the fetish. I also wounded the girl and the corrosive poison of my blade will be sapping her strength and eating away at her life. She will be trapped with her child and no place to run, like a bear caught in a tree.”

They grumbled but in the end the agreed to follow him. He reminded them that the reward would now be split between four instead of twelve and that seemed to spur them on more than anything else.

He had the strongest of the men carry the hagraven fetish and its stone base. Then he set off at a run to the grotto, thinking with some amusement over the irony of the situation. The girls brother had given his life’s blood to protect her and now he would use that same blood to help kill her.





Kolfinna cautiously made her way along a short winding rock tunnel until she broke out into a large clearing. She saw open sky above and wondered if this was some sort of hidden valley in the mountains or something more … otherworldly.



The wolf was busy licking its wounds next to small campfire with three bedrolls laid out. Presumably for her, Bron, and Kavel she thought sadly. She sat down next to the wolf with a grunt, the pain in her side making her dizzy. She recalled how hard it been to cure Bron’s wounds and wondered if she even had the strength to heal herself. But first she checked on the wolf that had saved her life and Kavel’s. It took only a little power to seal the wounds on his ear and tail. He would be badly scarred but she thought he would live.

She then took Kavel from her back and made sure he was okay. He was hungry but that would have to wait; she was worried her milk might be tainted. “Patience little Van,” she whispered. She set him down next to the wolf, her instinct telling her the animal would keep an eye on him.



Pushing aside her grief and weariness she tried to work a healing spell on herself. She was able to halt the spreading of the poison, and numb the pain, but was unable to remove it. She did her best to clean the puss oozing from the gash and then applied a poultice. As she was wrapping a bandage around her waist to hold it tight she sensed eyes upon her. She didn’t have to look up to know who it was. This time the voice spoke out loud instead of in her mind.



“Your brother was a brave and courageous hunter, especially for one so young. Should he find his way to my hunting grounds his spirit shall have a place of honor among my pack.”

Kolfinna finally looked up. The Lord of the Hunt had taken the form of a magnificent white stag. Kol was not quite sure what to make of this since the stag was a symbol of prey and surely they were that no longer.

“Should he find his way Milord? It is true he had some doubts, as did I, but we all know the ways of the wild. My brother loved his tribe and lived in awe of you. I am sure his spirit will seek out your hunting grounds.” Kolfinna said but there was still a question in her voice.

“His spirit has not yet passed over. Something is holding it back but whether it is his will or someone else’s I do not yet know.”

Kolfinna looked very troubled at this. She wanted to ask more but she hesitated as she watched the great beast before her nibble nervously at the grass. A Prince, nervous? Her heart beat a little faster; this did not bode well. As if sensing her thoughts the stag turned to look at her and then to her surprise bent on one leg and bowed its great antlered head.

“I promised you and your family sanctuary should you make it to my grotto and so it is too my regret that circumstances may prevent me from keeping that promise.”

Kolfinna let out a gasp of anger that she quickly suppressed.The Daedra, especially the Princes, were known to be a selfish lot who cared little for mortals. Hircine was one of the rare exceptions. While harsh, almost cruel at times, he was very protective of all his children. For him to almost apologize was … well it was unheard of.

Looking up at the powerful Huntsman she couldn’t imagine what might be stronger than the patron of the Berhamask. “Surely Kavel and I are safe here in your sacred grotto? How could the Hand reach us here?”

Hircine turned his head to look at the entrance before replying. “My brother, Prince Hermaeus Mora, has managed to out maneuver me at almost every turn. He was very clever. Only my followers may enter this grotto without my explicit permission. The hagravens, they are also my followers. They represent my darker side. That side of the hunt that is cruel, malicious, and dark. Life is a balance and it is only through adversity and challenge that it grows strong enough to survive. Mora used dark magic to preserve the life of one of the hags and bind it to his fetish. The head sleeps until it is fed fresh blood. It then awakens and can work its magic against the living.”



Kolfinna nodded in understanding, her eyes growing wide with renewed fear. Hircine was telling her that the fetish could be used to open the way into his grotto. She looked up at him, holding Kavel close to her heart, as she asked, “But surely you can prevent even a follower from entering?”

The great beast shook its head, anger in its eyes as it snorted hotly. “You must understand shaman, we are limited in our power on your world. That is the purpose of the barriers erected between Oblivion and Mundus. That is why we act through our followers, shrines, and artifacts. This grotto is ancient and its power old and faded. If you were properly trained as a High Shaman together we might be able to defeat the fetish but alas you are not. I shall only be able to hold them off for a short time. They are almost here. In a moment they will set up the fetish and fuel its power with the fresh blood of your brother. It will desecrate my grotto and then the Dunmer, known as Nelthas, shall lead his hunters in to kill you and Kavel.”

Kolfinna looked down at her baby, her only remaining reason for living. She would do anything to protect him. She looked at the Lord of the Hunt and asked, “Is there no hope then?”

“There is little hope for you but there may be for Kavel. If you are willing to pay the price.”

“There is always a price.” Kolfinna muttered darkly, “Haven’t we paid enough already?”

“Existence is neither fair nor just. For me to act on Kavel’s behalf there must be a price paid to balance the offset of power used. ”

Suddenly the Stag jerked its head up and its lips pulled back barring its teeth. “They have started. You must decide now. I can protect Kavel but only if you relinquish all claim to him as your son and give him into my custody.”

Kolfinna looked down at her Van. Only a few days old and already a pawn. He looked so innocent she thought. His bright green eyes so much like his father. And his dark midnight hair matched her own. It was a small price to pay she decided. What use was such a claim if they wore both dead? But claim or not, until she took her last breath, he would always be her Van in her heart.

She held Kavel up close to the white stag and whispered, “I forfeit all claim to my son in exchange for your vow to protect him.”

Hircine bowed his head, his soft muzzle touched Kavel’s forehead. Kolfinna thought she felt something, just for a moment, but then it passed. From the entrance she began to hear a faint noise, as if something was screaming, and the grotto seemed to vibrate with its cries.

Hircine cursed his brother and then turned to Kolfinna. “There is no more time. This is what you must do.”





Nelthas and the rest of his mercenaries stood a respectable distance back from the fetish. The instructions Lord Arom had left him explained what to do but the reaction of the fetish was still unsettling. Under his direction the blood of Bron had been poured into the bowl and as it filled up the head came to life. It cackled madly as it drank in the fresh blood. Nelthas tossed in the heart of a deer and intoned the words written on the note.



The shriveled head came fully to life and began chanting in an eldritch tongue that sent shivers through the group of men watching. The chanting went on for some time and as it did the blood began to slowly steam and bubble as if boiling … or perhaps overheating Nelthas thought to himself nervously. Something was resisting the fetish and it didn’t take a genius to figure out who. Nelthas was sure now who his employer was. Only a Prince would have the nerve, and power, to desecrate another Princes shrine. The grotto belonged to Prince Hircine, that was obvious. As for the other? It could only be Prince Hermaeus Mora. He had thought the necromancers name was mere conceit, certainly it was too obvious otherwise. Apparently he had been wrong.

Gritting his teeth in anger he waited for the fetish to finish its job. The hag’s head began screaming at an alarming rate and Nelthas began to wonder if the fetish was going to fail. Then it let out a piercing wail of such volume Nelthas and his men had to cover their ears. An explosion rocked the grotto and they all fell flat to the ground as bits of rock and dust flew through the air. When it was over Nelthas cautiously got up and looked around. The cave entrance had been blasted open and was now wide enough for he and his men to enter. As for Mora’s artifact little remained. The bowl had exploded at the same time and nothing of it remained but dust. Of the hagraven’s head only a burnt skull remained and much of that was ash. Nelthas kicked it aside with his boot. He was sure his employer would want to take it out of his hide. Fuck’em he swore.

He motioned to his remaining troops, “It’s do or die time, let’s get this Daedra cursed mission over with.”



Kavel gave out a small whimper behind her, crying softly. Under normal circumstances it would have completely freaked her out but she had already resigned herself to what was to come. She had entered an almost peaceful sense of calm as she waited for the mercenaries. The baby seemed so real it was spooky.



A changeling, that is what Hircine had called it. Deep in the grotto a lone Spriggan had claimed the area as its own. Hircine had bargained with it. It would not fight for them but it had agreed to help in another way. It had created the changeling. It had broken off one of its own limbs and molded it into an exact replica of Kavel, only made of wood. Then came the bargain. Sometimes the Spriggans needed the help of human allies; it is why they sometimes created changelings and then raised the exchanged child as a druid or a ranger. Hircine had promised to let the Spriggan adopt the grotto for its care. Should it need help defending the grotto then it could call upon Kavel once he had come of age. Kavel would be compelled to answer the call but it would be his own choice on whether or not he honored his mother’s debt.

A bond was made. The Spriggan fed a small amount of its sap to Kavel. After he had swallowed a few drops his eyes had glowed a soft green and then returned to normal. What effects the sap might have on him later Kolfinna could only wonder. Then some of Kavel’s blood was drawn and rubbed into the wood by the Spriggan. In less than a minute the replica had come to life. In almost all ways the baby looked like the real thing. The only thing missing was a soul. It was hollow, empty of true life. All it did was mimic a few basic human actions. In a day or two it would die and become nothing more than an inert piece of wood.



Kolfinna had had only a few precious seconds to hold her child and say goodbye. She had kissed his forehead and then each check. She had cried when Van had reached up and grabbed her lip with one chubby little hand and had tugged on it. Before she handed him over to the Spriggan she took her journal and tucked it into his blanket. It was her only means to teach him about his tribe, his brave uncle Bron, and herself. Then the Spriggan, carrying the true Kavel, Hircine, and the wolf vanished into the heart of the grotto. She had taken the changeling and had wrapped it up as if it wore her own and hid it in the woods near the camp.



Lastly she had taken on her werebear form. While it was formidable she had little practice fighting in this shape. As a shaman her human form was more useful. Yet she had one advantage over her foes. She had no reason to live anymore. Her only purpose now was for revenge. When she died she wanted to take as many of them with her as she could.



When she heard the explosion she moved a bit away from the changeling. She needed to make them think she was misleading them away from her child yet at the same time provide some hint where the changeling was. She raised her shaggy muzzle and let out a loud mournful wail anger and desolation that echoed across the grotto. A moment later the fight was joined. The end came as no surprise but as she died she was pleased to note she had taken three of them down with her. It was more than she had expected. Hircine would be proud.





Nelthas slid his sword free of the remaining Silver Hand’s body and wiped it clean on the man’s clothing. He hadn’t killed him out of greed, he had enough gold. He just didn’t want anyone spreading tales about this mission. It had not gone smoothly and he was still outraged at being played a fool by Prince Mora.

The shaman Kolfinna was dead, her werebear body laid out in the grass. Strange, he mused, normally they reverted back to their human form on death. Probably a side effect of his trapping her soul in his Dwemer amulet. He had hesitated only a moment before he had beheaded the infant with his blade and tossed the remains into the campfire. Not out of any moral scruples but because he had briefly debated letting the child live so he could sell it to slavers.



The child had had everything he hadn’t. A mother who had fought to the last breath to protect him. A family that would have loved him. He had taken all of that from the child just as the gods had taken it all from him. He wanted the child to suffer, to live with the same pain he had had to endure. But if he was correct about who Lord Arom truly was then that meant he was mostly likely being watched. So he had killed the infant and completed his contract to the letter.



He briefly wondered why he had not seen the owner of this grotto but assumed the Prince had abandoned his followers at the first sign of trouble. It would be so typical of them of he knew. He stepped over the body he had just killed and left the grotto. He still had one more errand to take care of. It was time to head to Bruma and get his payment … with interest.





Deep in the grotto the Spirit of the Hunt patiently waited. The Spriggan had retreated to the trees while it waited to see what happened. Hircine wasn’t particularly fond of them but they had their uses. Watching over the child was a pair of wolves. One missing its tail and right ear. The other was its mate. They would protect the child until help arrived.



Hircine looked through another pair of eyes for a moment. He had sent his mortal form out into the world, seeking the right one to answer his call. It had taken longer than he had planned but finally one had responded. He was chasing the stag even now and should be here by nightfall.



The werebear spirit tried to focus its awareness, still dazed from the explosion. It struggled to remember who it had once been. It remembered a great battle. It had been protecting something of tremendous value. Then everything had faded and for a time unknown it had floated in the spaces between reality and existence. It looked around, its ears twitching. It heard familiar voices calling to it but it couldn’t reach them; something was holding it back. Then its memories returned and HE knew who he was.



There had been a roaring and the next thing he knew he was in a fight for his soul against a hagraven. It was feeding on his blood and now wanted his soul as well. While the hag worked its evil magic in the physical realm it fought him in the spiritual realm. In the end its greed and hunger got the better of it. Bron’s spirit was far stronger than it had anticipated. The hagraven had tried to bind his soul to the artifact in much the same way its own soul had been. But the strain had been too much. When the barrier to the grotto had fallen the backlash had been more than it could channel. Bron had used the distraction to break the bind between the hag and its artifact. The result had caused the explosion that had rocked both the physical and spiritual realm. When his sense of awareness had finally returned he had found himself lost between worlds. The voices of his ancestors continued to call to him but he ignored them. He had made a vow to protect someone and he meant to keep it. He didn’t know how but he was determined to find a way.



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Notes: This ends the prologue for Bloodmoon Born. The next story will be an epilogue to the prologue with Nelthas and Mora. Then, barring any problems, the first chapter in Kavel’s life. It will pick up right where this one left off. One of Hircine’s hunters will find Kavel and bring him back to Falkreath … and thus begins the story of Kavel Bloodmoon.

I went with general images like I have in the past. Even though Kavel is alive this is really memories of the past and records that Kolfinna left in her journal for Kavel.

Some may be wondering what was that little bit about Kolfinna being soul trapped? More on that later. This got long enough as it is and I had to cut about three pages worth of detail as I didn’t want to break things into yet another chapter.

Changeling: It is typically described as being the offspring of a fairy, troll, elf or other legendary creature that has been secretly left in the place of a human child. Sometimes the term is also used to refer to the child who was taken. The apparent changeling could also be a stock or fetch, an enchanted piece of wood that would soon appear to grow sick and die.

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  1. choeli
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    My heart is breaking. And the music you put with this is.... amazing. You have such a way with words. They sneak their way into your soul. Thank you, Jon.
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      Oh thank you for reading some of his past stories. While I write a lot for myself it is always so nice to see someone enjoy reading some of my stories. I put a lot into Kavel's prologue stories and thought they were some of my better writing. Glad you enjoyed it! It was hard to write the ending - I was rather emotional doing it.
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    Epic is an understatement for this chapter. Very moving. So sad that both had to die. But had a feeling that it must be. Often the greatest thimgs are born out of sadness and sacrifice.
    Sad that Hircine could do so little to protect them in the end as he had promised. Guess that's another win for Mora.
    So Nelthas figured out who his employer was in the end. A clever one he is.
    So now we see Kavel Bloodmoon delivered. His destiny awaits.
    Outstanding work my friend!
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      Thanks Arnold - I took a small break after doing it. Emotionally it was hard for me as I dislike killing people in stories - and I got very close with Bron especially. As you saw things improved a bit later on at least!
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    Your title shot is one of the most stunning images that you've ever created and it's the image that comes to my mind now when I read your stories and visualize who Hircine is, as part of my game. This has been a fascinating introduction to this handsome new character of yours and I hope to read all your new chapters as you go.
    This particular chapter was hard for me to get through because I knew the outcome would be one of such sadness. I found it easier to read only a few paragraphs at a time- this past week- that kinda softened the blow, so to speak, of this tragic tale and the one big "tear-fest" that I knew would come (kept those tissue close at hand) from reading it. I really came to love your characters- Kavel's mother, Kol and her brave, little brother Bron. I would loved to have read and learned more of their lives, raising her son in Skyrim. But this is your story and it's a very good story that you've written and it is written well. You have such a talent for storytelling and creating the illustrations.
    I would also like to say "thank you" again for the image that you posted for me of Kavel. It really touched me that you did that but also after finishing this chapter and seeing his smiling face again, it makes this tale all the more tragic, in terms of the price his family paid and he did as well (and I hope this makes sense) because he IS smiling.
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      Many thanks for this very kind reply. It made me a little sad in a way. As I did think a lot about what life might have been like for Kavel had Bron and Kol lived. For me it was really Bron. There was something about him - deep in my unconscious - that really bonded with me. Young, a little naive, innocent in many ways (although experience with the ladies), brave, courageous, afraid but always trying to live up to what he thought he should be. he died a hero's death yet that sounds empty to me still (even though I would prefer to die a hero's death myself than languish away in a nursing home alone ... the Vikings call such a death a "straw death" meaning dying in a bed of straw).

      I try to balance it all with knowing all things die, young and old, and something we must all deal with. I suppose in some ways writing the prologue forced me to deal with a topic I find difficult. I have reached an age where I know my parents won't be around much longer and where I have seen many pass away. I have had to put too dogs I loved to sleep and feeling their life leave them while they lay in my arms ... I used some of that while writing Bron's death. It was like one second there was something there - some spark. Their eyes so full of life looking at me. Then a second later ... nothing. Yet the body was still there. So strange how that intangible something changes things.

      Sorry way off track here and probably not the best thing to right in a public forum. But thought I would explain a little of what went into the writing that few people know about.

      BUT we have Kavel. I will make a post later most likely but I restarted his game (I am a little anal about having the "perfect" start - Grim took 7 starts before I was happy with his game, Kavel is now on 4 or 5). This time I named him "Kavel Van Bloodmoon" which sounds strange but I wanted his middle name to be "hope" and it will be his nickname for those closest to him. He will learn about it from the journal Kol left for him. So he is my hope - from old life comes new life. The cycle continues ever onward.

      Thanks again for reading my stories and giving feedback. It really does brighten my day knowing even a handful of people enjoy what I write, even more so if it affects them in some way.
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      Thank you for sharing that about Bron and also about what you draw on, your feelings and experiences that help you create your stories. I think I understand you a little bit better now :-) I also know exactly what you mean about having the perfect game start and I have to laugh because I do the same thing! I just started my favorite little black-skinned elf's game over for like the 5th time- have to get her just right, who I want her to be or I will go nuts! lol ~Have a great week Jon~
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    exciting to the bitter, sad end.
    oh if there were a way for Bron to return... but this is not a dream, and I don't think Hircine holds Bron in enough favor to try and pull something like a resurrection for him. Probably considers just finding the Hunting Grounds as favor enough.
    Sadly Kol had to pay a dear price in two ways..... but the journal will help guide the young man I am sure. A mothers words, regardless of time spoken or written can carry well into the development of a child.
    Lord Arom...... of course Mora and Nelthas figures it out too late.

    Powerfully told chapter Wolf..... great shots to boot.......
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      Hey Steven almost caught up - just one chapter left and its a bit shorter then these I don't think I will get the next story out this weekend either lol. Teasing - I so appreciate people's time and how valuable it is. That anyone reads my stuff is always a delight, let alone all of it.

      Aye I miss Bron more than anyone. He really grew on me to the point I almost ripped apart my entire plot line for the book to leave him alive. Uncle Bron raises Kavel. Could have worked. But besides having the plot down I was attempting to write darker. I don't know if I have the emotional strength though lol ... I really am a happy ending type of guy. Perhaps because life is almost never a happy ending so I like my entertainment to be that.

      I don't think resurrection is possible - not even for Meredia or Mara. In TES lore I don't think there are any clear cases of that type of magic existing (necromancy of course but not actual resurrection). Could be wrong though. Hircine holds Bron and Kolfinna in very high regard though - just to be clear on that.

      Aye you picked up the journal. A little guide for Kavel to follow. Kolfinna had a premonition of things to come so she wrote the journal pretty much for her son - her only way of teaching him things she would not be able to do herself. Then there is also one other way Kavel will learn things ... but that becomes a little more clear in the next chapter.
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    Great work, Jonathan! Like always
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      Many thanks Khajiitas
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    Excellent chapter! What an amazing history Kavel has been given. Well done Jonathan.
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      Thanks kindly Asa! Aye going to be hard to have his own stories as good as his past :p
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    Really enjoyed this one, It was sad to see Kolfinna's reaction to seeing her brothers body, I think that actually moved me more then when she actually fell herself, I think the only thing which would have hurt her more than that would obviously be seeing her son Kavel dead.
    Its a choice most mothers would never have to make but I think most mothers would make the decision she made.
    Hmm I will look forward to seeing Nelthas's demise if we ever do. One might make comparisons to Elvina but Elvina had very different motivation for becoming what she was. Nelthas is on a much higher level of cold ruthlessness than her.
    Interesting events with those rituals, especially the one with the Spriggon. A good diversion but could there be a cost in the future to Kavel for that ?
    The whole pawn game with the Gods, Deadra's or what ever deity is always a interesting one. What your exploring between Hircine & Mora is one I'm pursuing with Nocturnal and the Night Mother they are effectively playing a game of chess against each other. They don't fight each other openly adn they are not out to destroy each other, they are just playing a little side game against each other while they go about their other business and manipulating others to do their work.

    Great start to kavel's Story a very epic piece of writing so far I look forward to more
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      Thanks Corfus. Aye I think you have it correct overall. Hircine and Mora are playing a game of chess (to them at least it is a game) but they do not do so openly. Open warfare between the Princes would probably wreck havoc across the planes of existence. The only adjustment I will make is that for Hircine he does care for his children and followers (and I suppose Notcturnal might as well ... but I suspect in a more distant abstract way) and he would protect them if he could ... but he is still a Prince. In many ways it is like a bad king (Mora) attacking the good king (Hircine) and both knowing it is their underlings who will pay the price. Much like real life when the ruler decides their shall be war but then sends in all the soldiers to do the dirty work.

      Hmmm got off track. I think Elvina is a bit warmer than Nelthas, at least I hope so. Nelthas is pretty dark. But he is not Psycho. He is ruthless but he does not kill for pleasure - for him the job is the pleasure - the challenge, out smarting someone, etc. He doesn't kill just because he likes to see blood. He just has next to no empthay, compassion, or sympathy - be doesn't bond or connect with others and hence doesn't feel much about killing them.

      Anyhow glad you enjoyed the story so far.

      PS - Yes the Spriggan's sap will have some small affect on Kavel
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    Well I have read this a few times as so me of it bothered me to be honest...... protecting the child was one that really I understood but even though I have read the comments and your answers is one that I find really ticks me off........ gods in their own right that can not even protect their followers.......

    Hircine draws them to him but then there no protection, only what Kolfinna and Bron provide. I understand that Hircine is less powerful here but geez think that is why I always had a problem with the princes, they want to be the all that and a bag of chips but have nothing really to offer back... if you get in trouble you are on your own anyway with maybe a bit of advise from them. On an off note I think the game itself did not give the Princes the respect they should have had or the lore to back up what they should have been.... Gods ......

    Ok back to this, the battle with Bron and the silver hand amazingly well told and shown, wow, he gave all he had and more to protect his sister and family ....... but knew death would be his ending when I started the chapter..... no other way out for him.....

    Nelthas, really what an asshole that man burns my butt, just to read him want to reach out and well lets say killer rabbits would be my gift to him lol........

    saving and be back to finish....... nexus is wonky for me today

    So a choice Kol must make as if she has not made enough that have taken all from her, home, friends, brother, now this.To have to know you must give up your rights, to give away what you have only had for a few days, your child as a mother is heart breaking..... its cant breathe, I will die if you ask this of me heart breaking and still she does it and then stands to do all she can to protect him with her dying breath............ well got to say this you wrote amazingly ..... broke my heart to read this one and more then a couple of tears .......... look forward to the next chapter.....

    Amazing shots and the battles wow........ undone yourself Jon
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      Thanks Shelley! I think it is tricky when dealing with Gods (and I will consider "Gods" to mean both Daedric Princes and the Aedra Divines) in a story. If the Gods are extremely powerful and always helping then why would any character be at risk? The God could always swoop down and rescue them. Look at Dannee and Sam. If Sam was a full prince on Nirn why would Dannee ever have to do anything? You get into dangerous territory (writing wise) when you give too much power to the Gods to interact in a characters life. Not just for good either. Why should Molag send Despair to do his dirty work if he could just go ZAP and fry folks?

      In general any game, book, or the like will have some way of limiting these things. They can also do it in reverse - making the character so powerful they are up there with the Gods. But in general there are some limits. Common ones are that there are rules among gods. They can't interfere unless another one does (i.e. Molag hurts Grim so now Hircine can step in and do something); there is a barrier that prevents the gods acting on a mortal plane (TES); the gods are so powerful that if they materialized on the mortal plane they would incinerate all around them; and so on.

      In this case Hircine and Mora are both at war. Mora can only act through his follower (Nelthas in a way) and Hircine is also limited (Kolfinna). Hircine does have his grove but Mora then has the artifact (fetish). It balances out - Mora won the battle because he was smarter and more clever than Hircine. Hircine did what he could but on Nirn he is not as powerful as in Oblivion.

      I think its just general frustration though. It is like when your character is captured by bandits or the Thalmor. There is really little you can do to stop it. Your hands are bound. Hircine was in the same situation. He got backed into a corner. He is not pleased about it and he did what he could to help but in the end he can't overcome the barrier between Oblivion and Nirn (and would you really want him to? If he could overcome it then so could the other princes). Also keep in mind he can be more powerful on Nirn IF certain conditions are met (certain rituals/rites done, an artifact us used as a focus, etc.)

      I think when you read the next chapter you will see that even Mora has his limits and faces the same harsh reality Hircine had to deal with.

      I agree that Kol and Bron did all the work - but then this world I am making is a bit more focused on the mortals. It isn't Grim's world where Gods come into the rescue when needed. In Grim's world they have a lot more power. I wanted to try a more subtle approach with the Princes - where they have to act through their followers just like the Aedra have to act through their priests. That being said the Princes can actually show up in Nirn in mortal form and work magic and the like - while you never actually see or talk with the Aedra at all.

      Anyhoooow I tried to put some thought into the process. If I was writing this in Grims world they wouldn't have died and there would have been a happy ending. I am getting the feeling most folks who follow me prefer happy endings ... perhaps that is why they like the stories. I was trying to write a bit darker but I think Jess does it better. So after I wrap up the next two chapters (what I committed to) I may go back to Grim or write Kavel in a far lighter method and skip the darker writing. Although even in Walt Disney Bambi's mother died in a forest fire at the beginning. So even Disney movies have some darker moments.
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      Oh no , I like your darker writing and not sure if others like the lighter side either , its different but you do it very well and should do what you want with your chars , really , this is some of your best writing yet ....... and you know I only tell you that in truth.....and I write so the gods are not all powerful either just well guess maybe it was the mother die thing that made me all pissed at Hircine lol .When I said it ticks me off did not mean your comments , gods when I reread it I was like omg sounds wrong I meant what kicks me off is how the gods are not really gods or not everywhere are they gods....only on their plain are they truly gods .....
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      Oh no worries - believe me I love it when people are honest (well polite and honest) around here. Getting real feedback is a rare gem.

      I mainly went off ... because well that is what I do - I ramble and go into detail all the time lol. Also Jess had a similar reaction to Hircine (she was also mad at him). Nataly, however, seemed to feel bad for Hircine which is how I felt - he really wanted to help them. He didn't want any of them to die - he had hopes they would re-populate the Berhamask tribe for him. Now with just Kavel ... so much is in doubt.

      Imagine what it must be like to be a God, with amazing powers, and yet you have to stand and watch your loyal, trusting, followers die and you are helpless ... impotent. No Hircine was not a happy camper. He did what he could - saved Kavel and protected him by making Nelthas and Mora think he was dead. It won't last forever (most likely) but should give him a chance to reach adult hood at least.

      I get what you mean about Gods. I think in TES the Gods were only gods on Nirn in the Dawn Era ... and their presence threatened reality. That is why Lorkhan tricked them I believe and why the Daedra got locked out. But I understand what you mean. What good is being a god when you can't do anything to help? Course the other side, what good being a god when you can destroy?

      Then again we have Dagon almost destroying Nirn, as well as Molag Bal. Seems like the Princes are far more active than the Aedra. We never really hear much about the Aedra at all.

      Anyhow loved your reply and always enjoy chatting with you about this stuff
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    Wow. So much I want to comment on! First, awesome. Loved the music choices though I could've done with one more piece (I think I read pretty fast). Zack is always a great choice.

    The big battle in the snow was amazing with Bron taking on his beast form and going toe to toe with the Silver Hand. I had a bad feeling he'd be cut down defending Kol and I was right but boy it was a hard bit to read. I'll admit to teary eyes as Kol didn't even have time to properly say goodbye before having to dash off to the 'safety' of the grotto.

    Then on getting into the groto she hears the lame excuse from Hircine that 'I can't protect my own sacred sanctuary because of big brother's interference! ' man was I ever mad. The cynic in me wonders if Hircine kind of wanted all this to happen so he could have full go at Kavel. I hope not but I did have to wonder.

    Loved how you wrote Nelthas again; you have a knack for writing an arrogant, devil-may-care assassin type. You should write them more often He certainly knew how to inspire the Hand to action; gold. THEN he knew how to handle the ones who survived; with a quick knife thrust to the back.

    Not sure if I was happy or sad that you didn't write Kol's death in detail. I kind of wanted to read about her take down and subsequent overwhelm by Nelthas and his crew, but at the same time, I didn't really need to have more tears (especially as Nelthas did the most vile thing possible to her - soul capture!! ). Intrigued to see where you take that angle.

    The changeling rocked me. Only because one of my favourite writers, Juliet Marillier, who writes Irish / Celtic Druid fantasy wrote about a changeling baby made of twigs and sticks that was used when a real baby was stolen away from his mother. I'm sure you've told me privately that you've never read Marillier so I was pleasantly surprised to read something along the same lore lines here. I was saddened that the changeling had his head hacked off though (I only hope that your changeling wasn't sentient like Mariliier's was! ).

    Finally you had the little twist about Bron. Nice. Is he going to stick around and guide little Kavel from the shadows? It'd be nice to think the little man doesn't have to grow up TOTALLY devoid of all family.

    A very awesome semi-ending to the prologue and now I can't wait for the epilogue where Nelthas lets Mora have it (or is that going to be visa versa? )... and of course, this is all just a precursor to Kavel's ACTUAL story! Wonderful work my friend.
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      Thanks Jess! I wrote you a rather long PM on FB so will keep this one shorter (I hope lol). The only plus with how Bron died is that he died in battle with honor, courage, and nobility. It is one of the best ways to die for a Nord. Course he is (or was) going to the hunting grounds but for him that is Sovngarde.

      I can answer your second statement on Hircine since it is not a plot point in any way - and actually one I will clarify in the epilogue as I think some other people thought this as well. I want to be very clear on my view of Hircine, which is not the game view.

      Hircine will be darker than Grim's version but not by much. I have always seen Hircine as a nature god - even though I know he is not. To me the "Hunt" is not about bloodlust and killing. It is about weeding out the weak. Hircine is almost like the personification of evolution. He makes sure that species grow strong (both prey and predator and this, at least, is in the lore) which is why he tests them all the time and pushes them to do things on their own with little help. The more help he gives the weaker he feels it makes them. That being said he knows help is needed at times - especially with infants/cubs or with the wounded and sick; albeit only if the wounded or sick can be made strong again - that is his darker side and one that reflects nature. Nature cares little for coddling. You survive or you don't, that is how it goes. Hircine reflects that (although later in my book this gets tested).

      Anyhow the big point is this - Hircine wanted Kol and Bron to make it. He "loves" his children and wants them to succeed and grow strong. But they had to prove it. When Bron died he regretted the loss of a true hunter. His regret towards Kol was 100% sincere and true. He had no secret plans to betray them and get Kavel for his own dark plans. He is not Molag or Boethiah or Mora. To me he is like nature - blunt, honest, direct, harsh, and not overly subtle. Another comparison would be that Mora is the highborn noble snobbish scholar/mage altmer - a genius who looks down at others. Hircine is the Captain of the Royal Guard. Well educated and good at strategy on the battlefield but also a simple, straightforward, down to earth person. He isn't stupid but he doesn't play like Mora does and thus was outwitted.

      So when he had his "ah-ha" moment on the Fetish (he should have caught that earlier, a bit of a weak plot point on my end but then I also do NOT want the Princes to be infallible), he could have kicked himself. But he is a hunter and he knows a bit about tricks and traps. By making Kavel "his" that let him protect the child from Mora's scrying. Of course when Kavel grows up ... and learns some of this ... he may not be happy with Hircine and that could be a problem ...

      Oh and remember Meridia could not protect her own temple from a human necormancer. Nocturnal could not protect her key. Molags shrine was being descrated by a human follower of Boethia. The princes are not that powerful on nirn due to the barrier. So Nelthas being able to desecrate Hircine's grotto is very lore friendly in that regard, at least IMO.

      I explained Kol to you in my PM. In case others read this - the main reason is that Kol didn't want it that way. She wrote her own ending - it just came right out of my unconcscious. When I went back to proof I did think for a moment to write out the whole battle (as it would clarify that she truly had no hope against Nelthas. Even if the White Stag, two wolves, and Spriggan joined in Nelthas is a walking arsenal and he had other tricks up his sleeve including his amulet, Soulcatcher (his dagger), his poisoned sword, and a ring I have not yet mentioned. Nelthas sliced Kol down almost as easy as he did the changeling. Most of them were hurt - the wolf was wounded, Kol was poisoned and exhausted, the Spriggan did not want to fight, and Hircine was drained from protecting the Grotto - which brought them some time to do the changeling - which I am familiar with for many reasons. Earth legends and folktales as well as many stories I have read that involve them. It seemed the perfect way to trick Nelthas and Mora. Also what better wood to use then the arm of a Spriggan? Glad you enjoyed all that.

      As for Kol's soul, and Brons ... some of that will be answered in the epilogue where I will wrap up some loose ends before I begin Kavels full story.

      Oops this got long ...

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      Loving the analogy of the scholar / mage and captain of the guard. Does well to really get across how you view the Princes. I guess I view Hircine as darker than you intend because that's just my bias (i tend to view stories through a darker lens). I just inherently mistrust higher powers who do something for the 'good' of someone (in this case Kavel). But, i'll take your word for it after all, you're not the one who has a history of torturing your characters... that would be me!
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      I had some tears in my eyes, when Bron died. The events in front of the grotto were very well and living described. Later in the grotto, the idea with the spriggan is grandious....I think it`s for the future a very important aspect...
      You have a wonderful fantasy and the events appearing for me really logic...it is a sign of a good story I will waiting for the next chapter.
      There are some wonderful pictures...I cant name them all...
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      Thank you and glad you enjoyed the story. Bron is one of my all time favorite characters in a story. It was very hard to see him go. The spriggan sap will have a small role. It is also my excuse for using the "One With Nature" mod as it will explain why Kavel doesn't get attacked by most animals. Also partly why he is vegetarian (that and his mentor Do'Tesh is).
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    Your description of that creeping fog as a snake stalking through the grass really brought out that unsettling feeling that Bron felt as he woke his sister and the insidious nature of the spell cast. Show's Kolfinna's caring that even though she knew she had to act swiftly, that she took the time to explain the situation they were in to Bron, hiding nothing from him. It was good that some of Kolfinna's abilities still worked, her being able to sense where their foes were. Her keen mind helping as well, with her understanding their foes, knowing why they waited and what would happen when they ran. It was unfortunate that their only means of escaping the trap set for them had a great risk for Bron, though it is not surprising that he would accept that risk with the connection between the siblings.

    That glimpse into the mind of Bron, into that connection between beast and man, that mix of emotion and instincts, as Kolfinna tried to keep Bron in control as she poured her anger into her spell was very well depicted. There was some great intensity to that battle, Bron fighting through his wounds to strike with great claws, Koflinna standing nearby using what power she had to make things more difficult for the silver hand and I liked that detail of that eerie glow among those mountains, gives the scene in one's mind such atmosphere. Bron certainly did well to keep some part of himself, to keep protecting his sister as best he could as he faced the more dangerous trio of foes.

    The emotions of that moment were Bron spoke his last words to his sister were really vivid, one could amost see those tears falling. Koflinna's motherly instincts sure gave her a lot of strength, letting her move despite the pain of her poisoned wound to get her child to the cave. She found an interesting ally in that spriggan, it helping with that trick for the mercenaries. Kolfinna's last moments with her Van were touching, her making sure to leave him with the journal so he would know of her and his tribe. It was very sad that Kolfinna had to give up her live to ensure the safety of Kavel, I had come to like her though I had a feeling something would happen to her. I look forward to reading of Kavel's path, years after that fateful day, fantastic work, Jonathan.

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      Many thanks for the reply Alexi! I made a best attempt to make the atmosphere menacing and dramatic so pleased you enjoyed those parts of the descriptions.

      I am not sure how people really feel about this chapter. It was pretty dark and sad and not my normal approach. I admit that when I am done with the epilogue to the prologue and Kavels first chapter I am not sure what my plans will be. I may return to Grim, who has some darkness but overall is more light-hearted with humor and more "fun" adventure style writing. I could also continue with Kavel but make it lighter although this was meant to be my chance to practice darker writing ... but not sure I want to anymore lol. This was a rough chapter to write. Maybe light hearted adventure with some heavy moments is more my style and strength.

      Ah don't mind my ramble - I just feel bad about things and it isn't in my nature to be comfortable with this type of thing.

      I am glad you enjoyed the story though. Perhaps after I do the epilogue I will feel a little better and I will see what people think.