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Excellent work hon!
Will quin now try to "tie up" this new "loose end" he just created with his hot head and big mouth?
Jade better watch her sweet little "six" like a freaking HAWK from now on....as if she didn't have enough to worry about before....^^
Interesting backstory on Selina, and how the various, long-term machinations and plots between her, Maven, Zuzu, and Sibbi-the-sex-sadist turned out.
Favorite'd.
Many thanks, Jess, and cheers, dear!
Doesn't it ALWAYS come back to ZuZu. Will Rathe EVER be free of her??
I am quite pleased she got her revenge on Sibi.
And you make me dislike Quin even more....
Great shots and the music selection fit very well.....
As for Quin; ah there's further depths to which he can plummet yet
The scene with Quin was extremely well written - tense, tight, suspenseful ... one of your best dialogue and ominous interactions to date. You could feel just how menacing Quin was (and a bit stupid, seems Jade did get under his skin after all). While I didn't care if he attacked her I was a little curious if you would have actually written that or maybe did a "fade to black" exit. I guess I simply don't connect to her as a character.
The weird thing is I connect more to even Quin - perhaps because he is a known villain and I can "like him" as a villain. But Jade, she just rubs me the wrong way I guess.
At the moment Rathe is the only character in your stories I like and really connect to - which may be the point perhaps? Maybe you are trying to show just how evil and dark everything else is around him as a way to contrast a lesser evil to a greater evil? Maybe showing why he should be a lone wolf? By showing how despicable every one else is it makes that small core sense of goodness deeply buried in Rathe shine the brighter.
Anyhow the writing, the word usage, the tempo of the story - all excellent and intense. Also for those who love dark stories this is a must read and a real gem. You really have nailed that style of dark writing with a dark-anti-hero that the reader can sympathize with and still care for.
Lastly the images - superb. Dark but you had enough lighting to see the faces just enough to be clear yet not break the mood of being creepy and evil. That feeling of being among criminals and the underbelly of life that exists and that you enjoy exposing to the light so much
PS - Was reading other comments. I think its just me that dislikes Jade lol ... everyone else seems pretty pro-Jade
PPS - Was re-reading some things, to make sure I didn't miss something, and listening to both songs again. They are awesome, especially the second one. Fit my mood tonight.
As I've said to others in the comments; this chapter served to highlight some of the WHY behind Jade but not necessarily excuse her, or set about making one LIKE her. If she was truly a pawn of Maven's game (or her past circumstances) she'd have tried to free those shackled slaves in the sanctuary. If she was truly repentant of her past actions, she'd not have crawled back to Maven when she offered her a second chance (of spying on Sibbi then her part in eliminating the Listener). So no, I don't think you're at odds for not liking her. And I don't necessarily feel 'pro-Jade' myself. I'm still very 'on the fence' with her. But more will come in subsequent chapters that will help in understanding her better.
Quin, well. Yes, he is a pure villainous character and hence easy to understand and even identify with. I could hardly write him much more repulsive (and I DID toy with the notion of him forcing Jade at the sanctuary), but it was his loose lips that ultimately put an end to him er, showing Jade just how excited he could make her. He realised he'd slipped up when he spoke so boldly. He used the one word he should never have when describing Rathe; puppet. Not smart.
I've said before that I enjoy exploring the flawed side of humanity and that's what I have tended to focus on in this Book. It's just that everyone else's flaws in this Book are much bigger and badder than Rathe's own, which I think is why he comes off as being the 'good' guy this go around. He's most certainly not, but when compared to Quin or even Jade, he's like a priest of freaking Mara! I definitely aim to have him set in the anti-hero camp and at the end of this series I will definitively place him in a camp for good. Whether that camp is good, bad or dead.... i'm not saying
Was great how you captured that twisted nature of Quin in your description of him approaching Jade after stalking her in those shadowy halls, that unsettling feel of it with the claustrophobic confines of that room. It is good that she was able to chase him away, her words certainly hit a nerve with him, that suggestion that he was not the one in control. Quin's temper is getting the best of him, making Jade sense something was amiss as Rathe had, with a skilled assassin and spy suspicious of his motives his plans are getting closer to unraveling. A fantastic chapter, Jess
I now understand jade much better having fleshed out her past a bit, but i'm still on the fence as to whether I LIKE her. I can't forget what she did to Rathe so easily (especially as it was all just to please Maven).
Yes, Quin is a creepy dude to the extreme but his tongue and the braggart in him sometimes lead him to get over-cocky... and make mistakes. We've already seen him give Boethia a tongue-lashing (for which he was promptly punished) so we know he's not the sharpest tool in the shed.... or maybe it's just that he likes playing the game with high stakes involved? Either way, he now has Rathe AND a spy onto him...
Amazing read and wonderful shots ......... they really set the mood for Mr. Creepy and Jade.
Riften sure if the focal point of all that's inherently 'wrong' in my world. All these types gravitate there or have something to do with that town (funnily enough except for Quin). Speaking of whom, yep, wasn't he at his most repulsive in this chapter? Ugh. I agree about Jade needing a bath after their 'meeting'. I actually find he writes himself; it's insidious but he kinda whispers in my head what he wants to say... ugh, now I feel like a bath!
As for where it'll all end up... not telling!
I only read a few of your last chapters, but they are all in one very intense and written in an awesome style. The images fit well together with the single text passages and show a dark scenery, like we all imagine the shadowy life style of the DB. You show us a great atmosphere!